NafaKitty

Hey there! Just your friendly, neighborhood kitty stopping in for a review as requested! Covered in dirt and looking nothing close to his usual charming self, Aaron dusted off his ...

Hey! Just your friendly, neighborhood kitty stopping in for a review. "I'm really worred about Brooke, Liam." Said Lydia. The period after Liam needs to be a comma. Whenever you ...

Hey there, just your friendly, neighborhood kitty stopping in for a review! I like how short this poem is. I don't typically like poems, but it works really well for ...

Hey just your friendly, neighborhood kitty stopping in for a review like I said I would! Wow! When I first started reading the story...I was NOT expecting it to take ...

Hi NafaKitty here for a review! "The forest ended just over the dead—grassy hill." There is no need for the hyphen here, I would recommend replacing it with a comma. ...

NafaKitty here for a friendly review! So, when i read the first line I wasn't sure I was going to like this at all, but it works. "When ya threw ...

Paragraph One: (I'm not counting the first sentence as a paragraph haha) Alright, so what caused Ray to finally muster up the courage to try to escape? Why hasn't she ...

I like the concept, and the wording of this. The rhyming would flow a lot better if you consistently rhymed. It's like you couldn't quite decide if you wanted to ...

Chapter 1: Why was James first thought that their father had taken her? What's his reasoning behind it? Chapter 2: What made him give up? What was he thought process ...

Paragraph 1: I like how you started this out. Raye sounds absolutely adorable. Just from reading this already I can't understand how her father couldn't love someone that is obviously ...

Hey there, just your friendly kitty stopping in for a review! I like that quote....I really like that quote. I think that was a good opener. It's definitely gonna be ...

Hey there! NafaKitty here to leave you a friendly review! The first paragraph seems extremely sudden, and slightly forced. It was just like "BAM! Here I am!" and it took ...

Yo! NafaKitty here! Just dropping in to shoot ya a review! :D "A strand of pale hair fell in front of her eyes and she reached back to pin it ...

I like how you opened the essay. The whole first paragraph really drew me in. The wording of it, and everything. I may be wrong (pretty sure I'm not), but ...

I honestly have no idea what you meant by "It's bad." I don't think this is bad at all. I love this. I really, really love this. It flows excellently, ...