Hello, Alex here for a review.
I know, I know... I'm very late.
I'm not good at writing reviews, nor am I good with poetry, but I will try to give some constructive criticism. Take it all with a grain of salt!
First, I want to say that I like this poem. I like the imagery. I would've likes more description. I'm good at letting my imagination go, and I had the freedom to do that with this poem. However, for those who have less of an imagination, I don't think they would've had a very clear picture in their minds. More descriptive language would've been very good. What were the sights? What were the sounds? What were the smells?
It was a bit confusing for me in places, perhaps this was just me? I'm not entirely sure what the overall message of this piece was, nor was I able to track with the general story the whole time.
I was able to for the most part, but you lost me a couple of times.
Thy rhyming was pretty inconsistent, I couldn't tell what formula it was supposed to be.
I won't say anything about grammar, punctuation, or spelling, because those are definitely not my strongpoints.
Overall, I liked it. Thanks for taking the time to read this review,
-Alex
Points: 139
Reviews: 25
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