NaRachel

Hey :) This is good, it really creates a kind of monster/dragon/stone age, i don't know how to describe it (i'm thinking along the lines of books like eragon). Anyway ...

Hey :) I agree its, interesting.... But i don't mean that in a way where someone doesn't like something and instead of being honest they say its interesting. Quite the ...

Oh my gosh its so amazing! Once again i was drawn in by the title which perfectly encapsulates how i am feeling at the moment. It's seriously perfect... The way ...

Hey :) You're friend is certainly very persistent :) I haven't read all the other reviews so my apologies if i say any of the same stuff. I really liked ...

Hi :) I found this story pleasantly curious. I love the poetic quality of it and the fairytale kind of style. I can't find anything wrong with it! And i'm ...

First of all great start! I really like the phrase "my wings fluttered by" it just implies something lost and beautiful. You used the twice in the third line, not ...

Hi :) this makes a good pop song if your not aiming for that maybe you should try to make it a bit deeper. Hard to tell where the rhymes ...

Hi:) i think the definition at the start makes it interesting. I like the short lines they make it more dramatic and the drama unfolds and becomes more intense towards ...

Hey :) i liked your beginning and ending. Nice short story that was interesting and easy to read. The second last paragraph was a little weak remember to only tell ...

Hi :-) A title could be" the one i love the most". I like this poem its deep, dramatic, metaphoric but also a bit cliche. As much as i liked ...

Hi:) first off i find the tense in the first paragraph confusing i think at one point you swap between past and present-tense which is understandable since writing in present ...

I would never dream of being unkind:) it is a little random and i come out of it thinking hmm something about leaves and then a beautiful metaphor about how ...

Just letting you know, i haven't read the first chapter . First things first. Your beginning sentence is way too long i skipped most of it because i lost interest. ...

I love it! Its a great theme for a short story. At the start i thought it was a bit (ironically) simple i.e you didn't use big words or imagery ...

Hi:) You've got the ryhming down pat and a good deep theme behind it. You don't need to make the meaning clearer- poetry is supposed to be a little ambiguous. ...