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Hello, darling! Music- here as requested! Grammar & Line-by-line Comments: The boy leaning against her desk was surveying her with an arrogant look that was filled with contempt, almost as ...

Hello, darling! I'm Music. :) Grammar & Line-by-line Comments: What’s the use? I thought. (

Hiya, White! Music here. :) Grammar & Line-by-line Comments: I told him that not going on holiday effects my health because as I am a teenage girl, the rays from ...

Hello, darling! Music here. :) By the way, don't forget the 2:1 ratio! 2 reviews for every 1 piece you post! :wink: Grammar & Line-by-line Comments: Dress , or top ...

Hello, darling, and welcome to YWS! I'm Music, and I'd be glad to help you with anything if you're in need. :) Grammar & Line-by-line Comments: If only love were ...

Hiya, Megan! Here for the third round. :wink: Grammar & Line-by-line Comments: Part of me was dreading the thought of spending my Saturday in a house full of posh snobs ...

Hello, Meep! Nice to finally review something of yours, my darling! Grammar & Line-by-line Comments: “Watch it, asshole!” Nice opening line, but could you hint at who said it? :wink: ...

Hey Tiger! Music here. :) Grammar & Line-by-line Comments: A sink was dripping in the distance , and the pitch black room smelled of mildew. I blinked repeatedly , but ...

Hello, darling! I'm Music. :) Grammar & Line-by-line Comments: He readjusted himself in his seat, took a sip of his soda , and reached over for some popcorn. He turned ...

Hi again! I just reviewed a different piece of yours. Haha. Grammar & Line-by-line Comments: She is dying , and I don't want her to. She looks up at me ...

Hello, darling! I'm Music. :) Grammar & Line-by-line Comments: Dear Dad[s].[/s] , I got this really smart white suit made by a guy in London (Lucas is wearing a black ...

Hiya, Megan! Music's back again, as requested! :) Grammar & Line-by-line Comments: That first night went by quite quickly , come to think of it. I arrived at Sunset around ...

A really short book I picked up from my grandmother's basement: P.S. I Love You. No, it has nothing to do with the movie starring Hillary Swank. It lacked emotion! ...

Hola, darling! Music here. :) Grammar & Line-by-line Comments: The lovely chemical whizzing through my blood stream wouldn’t stop me from feeling pain, though. Darling, you just said that your ...

Hello! I'm Music. :) Grammar & Line-by-line comments: “[s]That’d[/s] That's me,” I said, “but I didn’t order anything. D’you know who sent it?" The woman shrugged[s],[/s] and glanced over