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Re: The alcoholic introvert
Hello, retro! I really like what you're saying. I also have experienced this. I do not know if I am an introvert, but I do have social anxiety, and I ...
Aug 5, 2014 -
Re: sinking ships
Hi there! I'm here to review! Here is my honest opinion. It's filled with good intentions. So this is really interesting. I like what you do with the ships metaphor, ...
Aug 5, 2014 -
Re: Crystal Child Part 1
Hi there! Interesting stuff you've got here! I feel like we don't see many story poems like this anymore. I appreciate that you've chosen to write your story in a ...
Aug 5, 2014 -
Re: Contemptable Wrest - (Ch. 8) Part 1: Don't Dishonor Lotus Momma
Hello, wriskypump! I haven't read the other chapters, but I was able to figure out what's going on. There are some things I'd like to suggest for improvement. Sometimes, the ...
Aug 5, 2014 -
Re: The Siege, Chapter five: Checkpoint; Suspension post (I)
Hello, Alchemist! I'm here to rescue your chapter from the green room! I haven't read the other chapters, but I was able to figure out what's going on in general, ...
Aug 5, 2014 -
Re: Wages: Chapter Seventeen
Hello, Cirute! Though I haven't read any other chapters in this novel, I decided to rescue this one from the green room. I'm quite glad I read it-- it was ...
Aug 5, 2014 -
Re: This one goes out to Sporty Writer
Hello! I don't really know if I like this piece or not, but I do have some comments about the writing. I think that the language waxes a bit melodramatic. ...
Aug 4, 2014 -
Re: valley of a thousand winds
As requested, I've come with my portable torture chamber. 1) I have no idea what this poem is actually about. Obviously there is a theme with coldness and winter, which ...
Aug 4, 2014 -
Re: 1nce upan a tim.
I am here to praise this poem. While I did not enjoy it at all, it certainly achieves its goal. Its goal being a very bad poem littered with chatspeak ...
Jul 31, 2014 -
Re: These Days
Hello, Grieves! Unlike my fellow reviewers, I am able to find room for improvement here. The shorter the poem, the harder it is to pull off. Every word counts. What ...
Jul 27, 2014 -
Re: Second Always Comes Last: Cross Cutter
GOSH DANG I really liked this. You built the tension really well, and I had to put on my nitpick hat to find anything. I did find some things, but ...
Jul 27, 2014 -
Re: Black Eyes Book 1: The Seventh Spirit Chapter 10: The Sludge
Hi there! I'm here to save your work from the green room! One nitpick first, before I forget it. "Sceptical" is spelled "skeptical." Now that I've got that out of ...
Jul 27, 2014 -
Re: Bellum De Hominis Chapter 6- Meet The Righteous Leader
Hello, GeoCha! I'm here to rescue your work from the Green room! Obviously I haven't been with this story from the beginning, so I won't pick on the plot, as ...
Jul 27, 2014 -
Re: The Goodbye Party
Hi there! I really liked this. You gave the reader concrete images to hold onto while the abstract ran around on top. You conveyed your feelings well-- wistfulness permeates every ...
Jul 24, 2014 -
Re: Just a Player
Hello, NatD! Since you did me the favor of reviewing two of my poems, I decided to drop by and review one of yours! Queerelves already addressed the punctuation issues, ...
Jul 23, 2014
