Once upon a time,
I wrote a crap poem.
this is it lol.
lol.
the end.
This sucks so much.
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Hi, Strangelove. This is Pinkieishere1345 here. I see that you have 20 likes in this poem which it is very good for you. I am happy for you to be a likeable poem guy. I will review this poem for you as best as I can!
) I actually laughed at this poem. I can't stop laughing! Seriously, I can't stop laughing. Call 9-1-1 now. Anyway, I enjoyed this funny poem. You are the best poet guy ever! I hope you write more funny poems. See ya next time.
Hope you don't think she is rude person. She is always that way when she around with people that she likes.
I have to say that this poem is very pretty funny. That's what I wrote to my teacher once in my classroom when I was eight. (And I actually got a 'F' on it because of that.
Great Job!
Love,
Pinkieishere13.
P.S: I know that my sister say some mean things about you, but she didn't mean it. She actually likes you like a friend.
You spent 250 points on this? But lol it's funny.
I can really see all of the hard work and effort put into this.
I applaud you.
bravo.
Eva, you were in the scheme too!?
She did the title
>.<
Don't forget Blackwood did most of the work
Lot stop humbling yourself.
Lol, hilarious.
While I love you, Strange, and this was funny, I'm very frustrated that this is in the Literary Spotlight while quality work is ignored. >_>
Agreeed.
First of all, this made me smile. When non quality works make the spotlight, comments like this are usually made, but this isn't rude. I like that and yeah.
As for planning of this poem, how it was hatched, we were in The Lounge talking. Black right there told me to create a bad poem and see how fast it gets the spotlight. Then, the poem was made right there. It frustrates us, too. But, we posted it for the heck of it.
Thanks, Cole
It was in the spotlight within 10 minutes. (Or even less)
Let's call it a piece of satire that non-quality works make spotlight, and a social experiment to see if this would follow that pattern, and how about psychological torture while we're at it... damn, y'all are good.
Um...
200 points? 250? You must be rich...
Wow! That was funny
Why am I reviewing this? I promised myself I would never go near featured works. Why am I doing this? What the hell is this? Why does this have 10 likes? Why I am I still going? (Oblivion please let me end this...) I just wanna go to sleep. It's about to be morning, I can't be awake then... Why am I spamming this? (It's all Oblivion's fault...) So sorry... not really. it took two people to make this... This is so incorrect. I'm point hungry... Why am I doing this? Delete this worthless junk I've written. Just do it mods. Take the points I get for this, too. Just do it.... Bye, need to sleep until it gets dark again... This poem is unique... Not really../.
It depends, mate. First off, I hate to say this, your review was more of a rant than a review. Second, no. We are not going to delete this. There. Thanks for the review
Ugh, sorry for wasting your time. I kinda knew after reading my review over that it was a waste that's why I said to delete it. But I guess if you don't have a problem ten its alright. I guess part of me just wanted to have a little fun, since I guess that's what this poem is all about.
Oh, we aren't going to delete the poem I meant. But, it's okay. It's hard to review this anyways
I am here to praise this poem.
While I did not enjoy it at all, it certainly achieves its goal. Its goal being a very bad poem littered with chatspeak and the hilarity of rookie mistakes purposefully inserted into the poem.
You start out on this bad poetry journey well: with a cliche. In fact, if one were to write a sister to this poem (equally bad, but with too much description instead of the minimalism used here to illustrate the point), one might use "It was a dark and stormy night." It would be the only line that rivals this one.
Your improper use of the word "crap" contributes to the brilliance of the poem. In more polite company, "crappy" would be used instead of the noun form, but because you've used the noun form, the speaker gathers an air of ignorance, further reinforced by the following lines.
The redundancy of the chatspeak was a lovely touch. I almost didn't catch it, but I'm quite glad that I did. You might have left the second "lol" uncapitalized because you wished the speaker to maintain an air of nonchalance, but I think that capitalizing the whole acronym would add a touch of insecurity, which is also illustrated in the final, struck out line.
The end is crucial to include when a piece of work also begins with "once upon a time". Good choice.
I love that the last line conveys a feeling of insecurity from the narrator. He crosses it out, but leaves it on the page as if apologizing, yet still unable to keep his work from the eyes of the public. Ah, the plight of the poet.
While the spelling of your title is eye catching, I think you should carry the theme throughout the poem (misspell words and all that) if you're going to leave the title as it is.
I appreciate how you left punctuation at the end of each line. Beautiful avoidance of enjambment. Plus, that spares you from the decision you'd have to make to either capitalize the first letter of every line or to not. The only line that doesn't end in a period has I on the beginning of the next line, so kudos for making the narrator lazy and not make any decisions about that.
But really, I just analyzed this poem. I'm an English major, I guess. It was a blast. I seriously recommend that you write that sister poem with purple prose. It would be fab.
Nice job! I know that some of these choices probably weren't as intentional as I made them out to be, but it was fun to analyze it like that. Happy writing!
Haha. Thanks, Mags.
(As for why this poem exists, I was asked to do a bad poem then Black basically did it and this was the final result)
I hope you listed that as a review.
That's the most beautiful I have ever read!
lololololololololol
If this gets featured, I swear... XP
<3
Beautiful mayhem, Holy.
Or
HOLY MAYHEM
(puns)
XD
I cannot in all good conscience actually review this.
All I can say is "you actually posted it".
Wow.
I hope your mothers are proud of you.
I guffawed.
They involved me in it because I suggested the title. I didn't think they would actually take it.
THIS IS THE GREATEST PIECE OF LITERATURE EVER WRITTEN. YOU SHOULD BE PROUD OF YOURSELF, STRANGE. OH, AND YOU BROUGHT BLACKWOOD INTO THIS. HOW NICE OF YOU.
I KNOW. MAGIC WTP MAGIC
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Yeah I pretty much wrote the first 5 lines <3
I wrote the last <3
lmao