MoonMarkedFaerie

Hi! I really hope some of my advice is useful, My first bit of advice is this sentence: "Oh my wrong there are bees, a full swarm." I don't understand ...

I enjoyed reading this, although it made me feel a little tired, because I can definitely relate to it. I am either at school, or work, or studying and the ...

I like this, I wish I had thought to write my mum a poem! :) I personally think "My hero is my mother" should be reversed to 'My mother is ...

Just wow! :) I don't like the ending much though, and I contradicted myself by saying 'just wow' and then continuing didn't I? I think it needs a clearer, more ...

I liked it until 'with girls in small tops'... kinda killed my feeling of the poem but I really like your beginning and the rhyming is pretty good. It's a ...

I like it! It's very relatable :) The repetition of 'too' and 'would I die?' works amazingly. Keep up the good work! :D

I love the feel of this poem, especially the short little lines, that have such an impact regardless of their size and yes I am referring to your repetition of ...

This is pretty cute :D I really like the way this poem flows, written in an almost child-like manner and I love the way the poem is a metaphor within ...