Who is your hero?
What do you want to be?
When you look in the mirror,
What do you want to see?
I want to see a woman of grace.
Filled with love and compassion.
A woman with courage on her face,
and kindness in her heart.
I want to be someone who can handle trials
Who can get through sadness.
Someone who fights their battles
With love and devotion.
When I look, I want to see strength.
Perseverance and dedication
Will be shining upon my face.
I want to go through changes
My heart filled with faith.
These traits I wish for-
hope for, and dream for.
How can I achieve them?
Just be like the woman who taught me them.
I want to be like my mother,
The woman who shows all these traits and more.
My mother is my hero,
The one who calms my inner war.
She's been a woman of faith
throughout all her years.
A soul to admire,
One who loves and cares.
What do I want to be?
Who is my hero?
I want to be like my mother.
The closest thing on earth to my savior.
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I love this poem. My mother is also a hero of mine. You did an excellent job on describing how awesome your mother was. i figured it out when you said, "A woman with courage on her face,
and kindness in her heart."
I cannot find wrong with this poem other than the suggestions below.
My only problem with this poem is the fact that for you did not post this on mothers day! I can still show my mother but it's not the same.
Overall it was great poem! Two thumbs Up!
Thanks! Haha I did post it on Mother's day, or maybe the day before.
Jared here with another review.
This is very nice, first of all.
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"My hero is my mother" should be inverted to "My mother is my hero".
"wars" should be "war"
Praise and deeper analysis
I have to say, I enjoyed this poem.
This is one part I absolutely enjoyed to read. It was very thought-provoking.
This is another beautiful part. I don't have many suggestions to give out for your poem.
Very well done. Don't stop writing!
Thank you so much!!
I like this, I wish I had thought to write my mum a poem!
I personally think "My hero is my mother" should be reversed to 'My mother is my hero'
I also "wars" in the following line should be singular because it rhymes better. But after all it is your poem, and those are just my personal opinions.
I hope this helps some!
thank you!!
Really nice poem! I bet your mom loves it!!!
There was only one thing that wasn't quite perfect, in my opinion:
Deleting "on earth" sounds better, in my opinion. On the other hand, I see that you may be clarifying this so that the reader knows that God/Jesus Christ is your true savior that isn't on Earth. Maybe. I don't know. If not, I would get rid of "on earth." Of course, that's optional.
Great job! You used excellent words to describe your mother and I love that she is your hero. Keep it up!
Thanks! I agree with you, I was debating keeping the 'on earth.' So thanks for your opinion!! Hopefully she'll like it