Mizzle

Hai, there! In time and space, I saw your face. In a burning fire, I saw my desire. Trapped in the ice, Nothing could sufice . This is spelled wrong, ...

Hey there, Shep! This is a really, really good poem. It captured my attention because it's not a cliche subject you see every day, and you pulled the whole idea ...

Hey there, Kings! This was a nice poem; I liked it a lot. It had a nice theme that I'm sure we can all relate to sometime or another in ...

Hey there, Hibiscus! Overall, this is a nice poem with a great idea. It could have been pulled off a little better with better language use, though! So here's my ...

Whoa. You nailed the whole "boring as heck!" thing, which is what you were going for, is it not? The plot is kind of pointless, but eh...it's supposed to be ...

Hey, Eddie! How's it going? :D Okay, so I think this is a very nice poem you've written. *luffs* I disagree with Snoink completely when she says the first and ...

Hey there, S'getti! Mizzle here, as promised. ;) Overall, I think this is a very nice piece. It has a ton of potential, and I can't wait to see what ...

Hey there, RD! Nice to meet you. GAH! Science poems. *luffs* This is really very nice. The only thing I would say is that when you say "There, but our ...

Hey there, Sol. Nice seeing you around these poetry forums. ^__^ Anyhoo, this doesn't look like much of a poem to me. Poems don't need to rhyme, but they need ...

Hey, iamjemo! Nice to meet you. :D This poem has a nice idea behind it, but I feel that you didn't pull it off to its highest potential. I agree ...

Hey there, Yoha! This is a truly fantastic poem, a great example of "show not tell," or in your case, "hear not...tell?" XD. I actually disagree with Snoink about the ...

Hey, there! Wow. This was a nice poem, for starters. Very short and sweet; cuts right to the point, which is nice. I like your style of poetry here. Just ...

Hey there! I really liked the first four lines. They were, to me, the highlight of the entire poem. So beautiful--all in four wonderful lines! Eek! XD. But, like Snoink ...

Hey there! When the lights go out And I'm stranded alone I'll think of you to comfort my fear And drive away my anxiety. My hands will search for you ...

Hey, Pal! Well, I have to say, this is a nice poem. Like Snoink mentioned, though, your rhyming seem sort of forced and didn't make sense at time. The main ...