Mizzle

Hi there, Ziggie! :D Corrections are in red. Comments are in bold. This is about me , And only me. I felt this was a bit cliche, and the size ...

Hi there, blackbird! Here to review, as requested. (Sorry it took so long, my laptop died...>.>). Punctuation Wow; I can't tell you how nice it was to see someone who, ...

Hey there, Kiicoh! Bubbly bursts of laughter 6 like many other nights spent together. 10 My bestest friend, Taylor R. 6 Uh-oh! Haikus are known for there 5-7-5 line scheme. ...

Hi there, Kurald. Please note that corrections will be in red, and comments will be in bold. Walking down the street in twilight, This doesn't flow all too nicely. Maybe ...

Hey there, nicchaos! I'm Mizzle. Corrections are in red. Yes , I am a merchant, selling great things , but one ware is suited only for kings. You had "only ...

Hi there, Gaga! The blood of my children is smeared on my hands. Hera, divine and cruel. You will not rest until my body is frozen, grounded and gone. Until ...

Brilliant! Haha, this is fantastic. Though, Matt Bellamy is right when she says that F.R.E.D.'s Robotic Pad should have an apostrophe before the 's'. Still, I can't really critique anything ...

Hey there, ilyaeelz, and welcome to the Young Writers Society. First off, I agree with Spork and Glim; I don't know if I can truly give you a good critique ...

Hi there, Rascal! Here to review, as you requested. Please note that corrections will be in red. In the morning light , Isabella’s hair glistened with a light coating of ...

Hey there, WritingWords. =) This is adorable. Melts my heart; even at six, you were writing brilliantly. What an imagination you must have - and ooh, you are twelve now, ...

I understand that she loves her characters and all but if she wanted to convey any sense of reality(which was absent throughout much of the series) at all she would ...

Hey there, Persephoneia! Nice user name, by the way. ^__^ Heart shaped river rocks -- I brought them home just for you , But they dried and dulled And their ...

Hey there, Emalily! Welcome to YWS, by the way. It's nice to see you're already finding your way around. Anyways, on the subject of these lyrics, I thought you did ...

Hey there, Morgan! On the contrary, I didn't find this depressing. I probably should have - but I didn't, due to the way you wrote this piece. You see, to ...

Hey there, GagaBowie! Like a rotting corpse in the Earth, There is little i can do. You need to capitalize your i's. A vicious disease, it cleans me free of ...