Misty

I was fifteen when I wrote this and honestly haven't looked at it in six years. But thanks?

HOOOOOOW??????

why are you so effing brilliant, samwise?

God, Sam.

by the way, ignore negative reviews with broad, overreaching statements and no personal detail. you're a really good writer, and when you get older (or perhaps even now) you'll learn ...

I feel the need to revise my previous post. I had no idea that this was the girl's very first story, and was perhaps in an over-critiquing mode, so I ...

the last four lines are excellent and I got what you were talking about, which is a good thing

awwww....that's sweet. Although a book with no plot is questionable. but still sweet!

*agrees with Snoink, as I find myself so often doing*

last two lines = good. other than that...er...yeah, bad.

*coughs* *echos what Snoink said* I've seen this. More than once. In fact, this is a typical teen angst poem. "She deserves a life worth living" Really. Really?

I agree with Sigfried about the transition. The first half of the story interested me, the second half didn't. At all. Try again?

haha, chatting it up in the poetry forums. I'm good. just taking a break from book edits.

just very, very wordy. what is the point of elaborating for that long about a weed? the title and those sentences would be fine. (grand sentences, though!) and hello! :) ...