Misty

how very odd. :P I rather like it. :D. She's craaaazy, isn't she? You put her thought process down very well, the reader is really drawn in, and I enjoyed ...

hmm. I found this to be rather poetic also. It made absolutely no sense, however. I guess that was what you were going for. "All the way home I kept ...

hmmm...I liked the beginning but after that it sort of was just like...rambling on. Though at first it captured my attention, I got bored of it really fast. :P maybe ...

:P SAMMY! you've done it clue what's going on or why he can't see the girl (and of course there are a few typos from typing w/ your eyes closed) ...

*I can't believe I'm giving you a deep crit. I NEVER do this. You owe me, dude* Down the streets of Ravenswill, walked Akaira. *I WOULD SAY, "AKAIRA WALKED DOWN ...

" The doll was the only one that witnessed, All the flowing of the crimson pain, She could not close her fixed eyes, " omg i love this stanza. The ...

hey...I am absolutely AWFUL at critiques, due to lack of experience, really, but I'll try: you gave me nightmares about those emerald eyes: [that's pretty much adorable] submerged in saturday-night ...

Ah. I am going to feel useless after everyone just gave you deep crits. But they took all the crit up what can I say? Hmm...some people were just slightly ...

the light breeze threw us around like a bleeding fist. a perfect example of forced rhyming. Which this whole poem was. Not to metion the flow was completely ruined at ...

Hah. I'll critique your poem. Although I can't pretend to be an expert like these other ones. Fuck you, television watcher Isolation, the-world-doesn't-touch-you-liar. Artificial adult, hugging Americ

Churning up rocks and dust along a rutted old post road is a horse, a fresh young bay running at full speed down the path. *nice description. Sounds good, flows ...

I read the first two chapters (I'm too tired to do any more right now,) and just let me say, you kept me interested. In fact, if I didn't have ...

This was the most unkindest cut of all. Julius Cæsar. ACT III Scene 2. I like how you start it off with a quote from something so all-encompassing. Bah---have read ...

Wow. Intriguing. I caught a couple of grammatical errors towards the top, but for the most part this drew me in from the second sentence on. If you reread a ...

meh...you actually managed to write a poem that I don't like. that in itself is a huge accomplishment, because I like almost everything and everyone... hmm...I guess it was just ...