MissGangamash

Hello! Here to review! I'll review as I go and then do an overall sum up. 'and it’s tainted windows leaked it’s darkness to the outside.' - I like this ...

Hello again! Here to review! 'He traces the darkened lines,' - 'traced' past tense. 'he looked down to see pale red eyes careening up at him.' - 'careening' doesn't make ...

Hello! So I have read some chapters of Before the Dragons... Am I guessing right that this is a sequel? I have not finished Before the Dragons so I'm just ...

Hello! Saw this in the Green Room and seeing as you're reading my work I thought I'd repay the favour! Okay, I feel like this piece has a good foundation ...

Hello! Saw this in the Green Room so I'm here to review! There were parts of this that I thought were really powerful. Particularly - 'he gets into the habit ...

Hello! I am here to review! I saw this in the Green Room but I haven't read the previous chapters. I shall do what I can. 'Every little details counts' ...

Hey! I saw this in the Green Room so thought I'd check it out. I haven't read any of the previous chapters so I won't talk about story and plot ...

Hey, saw this in the green room and noticed the narrator sounded similar to one of mine own so I was intrigued as to how you've got about it! First ...

Hello! Here for a review! I'll point out things as I read then do an overall review. 'turning inside out itself as the fire patterned itself the surface of her ...

Back again! 'Right now his hands were hurting or in pain at all.' - weren't hurting. 'In fact, he could barely feel any difference. However, he knew things were different ...

Back again. ' He looked up through the overlapping branches at the yellow-orange hue of the sky started fading into blue, and the birds above started chittering, and trees shielded ...

Here again! I like that all these chapters seem to be taking place at the same time and you are using the bells to show that. I'm guessing at some ...

Hey! Saw this in the Green Room. It's always difficult to review memoir type things because you don't wanna step on toes as it is your story to tell, but ...

Hey! I'm back. The writing is great, no criticisms there. Characters with some sort of disability are always fascinating to read so when it was mentioned that Tyri is blind, ...

Hey, saw this had no reviews so here I am! Okay, I'm confused by the style of this. Is it supposed to be prose, or a script, or what? The ...