MissGamer8

Your writing has a lot of large adjectives. It got a bit overwhelming, I felt you could know have cut some of them out. Like in ""Aha!" The Dean yelled ...

This prologue was very interesting. I didn't understand in the beginning that the man was falling. I felt the beginning could have been better put if the beginning was put ...

I agree with ladcat that the character needs a name. I'm guessing since you put this in the novel section that there will be more and I can't wait! Not ...

This is a nice poem. It has a nice flow in the story, the stages in which the darkness is consuming you. Then leave people with new questions to think ...

I'd agree, this poem repeats too much. But I think reworking it, it could be a good poem. I like the emotion put in the poem. And a suggest: change ...

I'm agreeing with the last post about the "lovely, lovely" part of the song. It doesnt seem to fit in very well. Now format: I cant find the chorus. Now ...

hmmm... I'll have to agree with the last person but there are a few things that have me confused. Its that you change your rhyming scheme. Kind of like you ...

Just a comment to Suzanne: It's called Fearless because of the very last line is from the song Fearless by Taylor Swift. Okay, since you already know about the grammar ...

Soo. . . I like this. The beginning I didn't understand that this was talking about a girl then bang, A girl appears. Interesting. . . the rhyming works, but ...

My first real review: I think that it sounds great except for one thing; other than spelling... the use of searing in the beginning. I feel that it sounds too ...