My hairs fly backwards and sway as if they seek to detach themselves to seek protection. The breeze blow into my eyes with so much force that I have to shut them halfway in order to regulate the inflow.
I look down and gaze at the several people watching me as I spear towards the ground, to my demise. 0.24 seconds ago I had jumped off the rooftop of the Royce Penton 41 storey hotel building.
Businessmen and women paused their journeys to yell in horror as they are about to witness an unavoidable event. I say unavoidable because 10 seconds ago my decision to jump off was avoidable. This outcome was just one out of the plethora of possibilities that could have effectuated while I was still on the roof.
My name is Professor Von Wilder, and my body is currently adhering to the law of gravity.
0.39 seconds and I'm still air-borne. My patience diminishes by the millisecond. I have often heard the statement 'at the sight of death your whole life flashes before your eyes', yet I wonder why no flash has crept into my mind. Perhaps I should voluntarily actuate an episode of reminiscences before my brain splatters and releases the memories into the sewers below.
My thought abruptly wanders to the phenomenon of having all these thoughts in two seconds. The brain is an amazing element of life. An element whose capabilities a majority of humans know very little about. The speed at which I have trained my brain to compute data would cause me to receive accolades from the greatest institutions of the scientific academia.
It is for this reason that I possess the preternatural ability to think a lot quicker than the average human.
I must be forgiven if my narration switches to the third person; it is a product of my great predilection for the theatre. This is my story, and within it are the events which led to this aerial outcome.
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This prologue was very interesting. I didn't understand in the beginning that the man was falling. I felt the beginning could have been better put if the beginning was put in shorter sentences. Quicker thinking with him, you know, falling to his death. The first paragraph should be revised. I had to read it a couple times to understand what it meant.
This is brilliant. I really enjoyed reading this and I like your style of writing! The prologue is very gripping and is a page turner, which I think is a really good way to start your story. It's also very interesting and it looks as though the plot of the story will be fantastic and has good potential. You've left me wanting more and I love it.
Brilliant.
Granted, I'm doing the math in my head, and while I'm far from being a genius (particularly far from being a math genius) I think that by six or seven seconds you would have hit the ground, if jumping from the 41st floor. You'd at least be close. 16 seconds is far too long to fall, if I'm guestimating correctly, so be sure to do your homework.
Anyway, moving on from physics!
I love the tone of this. Truly, I'm always enamored with hyperintelligent people who manage to mediate their mental acuity with a certain level of character, and so he's already compelling to me personally. Beyond that, this is a great way to begin a story! Perhaps it isn't the epitome of original, but it's pretty close to being your own. And now with his mind spewing off rapid-fire memories, I'm more than excited to see where this goes and, of course, why he's chosen to jump in the first place.
If you're ever looking for someone to follow this story through, feel free to message me when the next chapter is out! I'd be more than happy to continue reading.
Keep writing, and best wishes. xxx
Thanks for the praises; I'm delighted you like the story. I have published Chapter 1 part a. You must pardon the short length in which it appears: work.php?id=100967