Miraculor77

Hi! Mira here (again). I'm just going to get into the critiques right away. You use a lot of run-on sentences and sometimes forget to use punctuation. Paragraph 1: I ...

Hello, Mira here for a review. To start off, this is a very good beginning. It gives some information to pique the reader's curiosity but doesn't give away too much. ...

Hello! I just wanted to say... this is very interesting. Now for the review part: I honestly don't think there are any actual mistakes in spelling and grammar and such. ...

I've gotten detention before (thrice), but thankfully it didn't occur on any day of great importance. In-school suspension, on the other hand, is considerably worse. I showed it to my ...

Hey there! Mira here for a review. I just wanted to point this out first: this story is amazing, and you shouldn't be so shy about posting it! Now for ...

Hello there! Below is a list of critiques (and sorry if I sound like a jerk, I totally didn't mean to!) The transitions could be improved, though if you intended ...

Hello there! To start off, you're right, that title doesn't really fit. How about something along the lines of... The Thief's Accomplice? Now the critique: Maybe you should give the ...

Woah. I actually felt afraid when Pearl felt afraid. This short story is really good, and if you can, you should do a part two. The transitioning can be improved, ...

Hi there! First things first: I really liked the story. It flows very smoothly. As Manilla said, giving away the backstory too quickly takes away from the suspense. I myself ...