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Re: Morbid Circus
I love how you wrote about the dark part of the circus. Because when someone thinks of a circus the image they conjure up is one of cheerfulness or something ...
May 1, 2011 -
Re: Be Quick.
Unlike, all the others, I don't think there seems to be anything missing here. It's pretty good actually. I love the emotions you sent through the poem. I also love ...
May 1, 2011 -
Re: My fly
Okay, I'd really hate to agree with the others, but this poem do really need some serious work done. Overall, the poem didn't really made sense, to me at least. ...
May 1, 2011 -
Re: The Legend of Dana(Chapter 1)
Well, this is intersting. You've left the readers something to look forward to and find out in the next chapter, which is the point, I think in the first few ...
Apr 29, 2011 -
Re: [deleted]
I think that this poem is a little short and unexplained. I think that it could be expanded on. But so far, it's not bad. Alone, thinking of you I ...
Apr 28, 2011 -
Re: The Death of Bieber
Okay, this poem started off brilliantly then starts to get a little disconnected towards the end. Mainly because of the fourth stanza I think. The scariest thing I’ve ever done, ...
Apr 28, 2011 -
Re: Just Listen...
I do think that the poem is a bit repetitive and like the last reviewer, I did wait for some important revelation at the end. But it didn't have that. ...
Apr 22, 2011 -
Re: Jump
As the first two reviewers have pointed out, the last stanza was brilliant. I also liked how the story was built up, revealing that the narrator was a murderer at ...
Apr 21, 2011 -
Re: If It Is Not Love, Then What Is It?
This may just be me, but I think that the flow of the poem is a bit broken because of the way the lines are set out. Sometimes you cut ...
Apr 19, 2011 -
Re: Devil's Playhouse
Okay, first of all, like the first two reviewers mentioned the imagery and description is very well done. The language and words you choose to make up the lines are ...
Apr 19, 2011 -
Re: Blinded by Sight
The way that you conveyed your emotions through images is brilliant. You can tell by the pictures and things that's happening around what is in the characters mind. The images ...
Apr 15, 2011 -
Re: If I Were To Love
Wow. I love this poem. The flow and choice of words in there is very well done. Although I do think that you can expand the last paragraph more, like ...
Apr 15, 2011 -
Re: Should've Known
Hi tgirly, First of all, welcome to YWS and I'm pretty sure it's in the right category. Onto the review, well, this is a nice poem, it's got a nice ...
Apr 14, 2011 -
Re: Screams Of Thunder.
Okay, first of all, there's capital letter in the middle of the sentence. i don't know if it was supposed to be this way or not, but it made no ...
Apr 11, 2011 -
Re: Infinite Days
Wow. I loved this poem. It's a very powerful poem. I liked how you've put rhyme in it whilst making it flow perfectly. So, well done for that :) The ...
Apr 10, 2011
