MiRaCLeS

This is very good, really. You used rhyme and it didn't sound forced or awkward. Good job on that :). Some nitpicks: - The rhyming structure falters in the second ...

Hello MarciEvans! So, you have a very good writing style there, I found the tone quite pleasant and easy to read. However, the paragraphing, as lilymoore has mention is lacking. ...

I gave you everything, yet you asked for more You are still what l adore But I had so much more before. This might just be me, but I think ...

This seems like a really short story. I feel as though, it's not totally complete. The whole story isn't told yet. I think that this story has the potential to ...

I really liked the metaphor you incooperated into this poem. It's simple, effective and really powerful. The metaphor also made an abstract idea (love) into something physical, something that we ...

I have to agree with inkwell here that the spaces before the commas and full stops aren't needed. They look confusing, detached and is generally really distracting. It also stands ...

Agreed with the other reviewers, the content wouldn't hurt with a little revising. Poems is not all about rhyming, infact, in my opinion, in a poem, rhyming come last. Content ...

Alright, emotions are probably the best way to get a poem. However, when you write it all down at first, it's going to be rough, it's going to be messy ...

The story was sweet and honest. However, it seemed a bit shallow. It lacked a bit of depth. I know you mentioned it was a daydream but, it doesn't have ...

First of all, I don't like the ending. At all, it's like an abrupt hit in the face. We've been given this taste of terror and adventure and then it ...

They were big and long lashed and everytime I looked into them I would drown in the browness of them. The word 'browness' in this lines sounds really awkward and ...

I liked how you personificated Writer's Block made it seemed like a person and a physical obstruction. because this immense pain you cause me eternally makes me feel alone. This ...

Okay, so this is a pretty good story. The story is not confusing, it's clear and it seems to have no grammatical problem. However, I do think that you can ...

Well, this is interesting. The new twists you've set up about how vampire and werewolves were friends and not enemies was one that I've never seen that before. Very creative, ...

My pen takes contact with the paper, This line sounds a bit awkward, I think the problem is with the word 'takes'. Wouldn't 'makes' make more sense and flow? and ...