We All knew It Would Happen In The End

I agree and disagree with Miracles.

An extra syllable would help that line, but "ever" would make it 9 syllables, and a syllable too long.

I'd suggest making it something like

"I doubt the thought had/has crossed your skin."

That's all

This is very good, really. You used rhyme and it didn't sound forced or awkward. Good job on that .

Some nitpicks:

- The rhyming structure falters in the second and picks up again in the third stanza, this seems out of place. I'd suggest you keep the rhyming structure consistent throughout the whole poem, the whole thing just looks better if you do.

- With the third line of the third stanza. I think that the word 'ever' should be added.

MattLangg wrote:I doubt the though #FF0000 ">ever crossed your skin.

MattLangg wrote:But now you'd walk through hell for him. #FF0000 ">8
Would you do the same for me?#FF0000 "> 7
I doubt the thought crossed your skin. #FF0000 ">7
I knew you could never see. #FF0000 ">7

Two can play at this game.
Or at least one can win. #8000BF ">If two are playing, only one can actually win? At least, that's what I think. Maybe change this to something like "But only one can win." (Also, if you were to decide to change it like that, I would consider making the period at the end of the first line a comma)
Now things can never be the same.
Why'd you bring him up again?

You said that he was gone,
banished from your life.
You said that you were wrong,
that it would be the last time.

But now you'd walk through hell for him.
Would you do the same for me?
I doubt the thought crossed your #8000BF ">skin. An interesting concept, I'm intrigued by your choice of "skin" here, because thoughts generally cross your mind.
I knew you #8000BF ">would never see. #8000BF ">Just a thought - could worked fine, but would sounds better to me.

Because if you #8000BF ">did you would know #8000BF ">Also just a thought, to fit with the would. (This actually sound better tense wise, because you've been using present up until this stanza)
that all of this #8000BF ">is killing me. #8000BF ">"Was" didn't fit the tense you've been using through the poem.
And if you #8000BF ">did, then you would know
that this will be the end of me.

Hello, I'm Jojo!
And I shall be your reviewer for today.
You have sort of a reputation for doing flawless work and stuff, but I think I can actually stick to a real review on this one.
So here I go.
Grammar is in #FF0000 ">red.
Others are in#0000FF "> blue.

MattLangg wrote:Two can play at this game.
Or at least one can win.
Now things can never be the same.
Why'd you bring #0000FF ">it up again? #0000FF ">*Why not say "him' in stead? If you mean "it", by the story itself, that's fine. But it just flows better if you keep the pronoun constant.

You #0000FF ">told mesaid that he was gone#0000FF ">,;
banished from your life.
#0000FF ">AndYou said #FF0000 ">(that) you were wrong,
that it would be the last time.

But now you'd walk through hell for him.
Would you do the same for me?
I doubt the thought crossed your #0000FF ">skin.#0000FF ">* Just seems like a desperate attempt to rhyme. Doesn't make sense. I'd stick to "mind" or try a different lines pair altogether.
I knew you could never see.

Because if you could#FF0000 ">, #FF0000 ">you would you'd know
that all of this was killing me.
#0000FF ">And If you could, then you would know
that this #FF0000 ">will would be the end of me.#FF0000 "> *inconsistent tense, there.