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  • Novel / Chapter » Teen Fiction, Action / Adventure Re: Mayday Chapter 1

    Knight Malachi here to review for Review Day. Paragraph one is composed of short sentences. Now some short sentences are fine, but not when you have this many. A small ...

    Sep 29, 2013
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: Nothing Sweet

    Knight Malachi for team blue on Review Day. As well as Green Room reviews. When I cut the second time I believe it should be: "When I cut myself the ...

    Sep 29, 2013
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: Leprosy

    Knight Malachi for the Green Room review, as well as blue team on Review Day. This poem was very well written, and i liked the flow of it. i don't ...

    Sep 29, 2013
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: Palm Reading

    Knight Malachi here to review for the YWS Default Backgrounds, on Review Day. So I don't really know the meaning of palm reading; is it a certain type of writing/reading? ...

    Sep 29, 2013
  • Poetry » Romantic, General Re: Beautiful Love

    Knight Malachi here to Review on Review day/night here in the USA. So this was very nicely done. I liked how it seemed as if the love died, and then ...

    Sep 29, 2013
  • Other » Fantasy, Supernatural Re: story success

    Knight Malachi here to review for Review Day. so this idea sound fantastic to me. This sounds like it could b a really Really interesting book. I am writing a ...

    Sep 29, 2013
  • Poetry » General, General Re: Hallelujah

    Knight Malachi here to review for Review Day. So I don't really know what this was about either. I was confused as to whether or not this in commemoration of ...

    Sep 29, 2013
  • Poetry » Narrative, Other Re: This, My Excavation

    Knight Malachi here to Review for Review Day. So I don't know who Bon Iver is (please don't pound if he is famous") So this poem to me was weird. ...

    Sep 29, 2013
  • Poetry » Realistic, Romantic Re: Lacuna

    Knight Malachi here to review for Review Day. I am claiming this for my badge to review another Green Room Knight, the name of the badge escaping my mind AT ...

    Sep 29, 2013
  • Novel / Chapter » Mystery / Suspense, Action / Adventure Re: The Nameless Generation - Prologue

    Knight Malachi here to review on Review Day. This story was very nicely written, and very well detailed until Stephen heated up the milk. the night seemed to pass with ...

    Sep 29, 2013
  • Poetry » General, General Re: Your Words Will Change The World

    Knight Malachi here to review on Review Day, and as a Knight of the Green Room. So there are lots of short stories and poems composed about this subject of ...

    Sep 29, 2013
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: The snowy Moor

    Knight Malachi here to review for Review Day, and the Green Room Knights. This poem was short,fast,concise, and hilarious. Your descriptive language and detail made this not only easy to ...

    Sep 29, 2013
  • Poetry » Mystery / Suspense, Realistic Re: Not Yet Solved

    Knight Malachi to review for Review Day!!!!! So you should have a period, not comma, here. I'll just sit here and stare at it a little longer, Maybe I just ...

    Sep 29, 2013
  • Poetry » General, General Re: No More Apologies

    Knight Malachi to review for Review Day. So I am not big on romantic poems, but this wasn't half bad. I thought you did a fabulous job of using metaphors ...

    Sep 29, 2013
  • Poetry » General, General Re: Hobo Billy

    Knight Malachi here to Review for the Knights of the Green Room on this splendid and exciting review Day. So this poem is somewhat sad, very random, and i don't ...

    Sep 29, 2013


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