The Candle.

by GreenLight24

Published September 2, 2013

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In Fanfictions.

Author's Note: Hey everyone! I'm fairly new to this site, and have really enjoyed the experience so far. This place is awesome! This is the modified version of a fanfic I wrote a while ago about Princess Azula set a month after her breakdown. ATLA and non-ATLA fans alike, here it is. Enjoy!

The Candle.

Azula peered thoughtfully at the great black wall before her. The air was cool and dry, and the entire room was pervaded by the eerie silence that had become so well known to the former princess. Azula felt the icy floor with her pale fingertips as a familiar lump began to force its way into her throat. Here she was, the former pride of the Fire Nation, merely a prisoner trapped inside of her own shattered mind. "I need to sleep," she thought, "Dr. Pho said I needed rest." As she began to pull herself off of the stony floor, Azula looked up towards the flickering candle that was her only connect to the outside world. The bright orange flame seemed to dance back and forth in the unforgiving darkness of her cell.

"Hello," whispered Azula, her voice cracking in an attempt to hold off her quiet sobs, "Coronation tomorrow." There was no response. Azula's lips curled into an uneven frown and the light sting of hot tears filled her golden eyes. The fallen princess stared blankly at the candle, her vision clouded by salty liquid. "Answer me!" she moaned, "Why won't you answer me?" Azula took several deep breaths before stepping back into a refined stance, her hands placed out in front of her as if she were ready for a duel, and her teary gaze still fixated upon the warm glow of the candle. "Stupid hair!", she spat as she swiftly brushed a single wisp of black hair from between her eyes. Azula squeezed her eyes shut as she lunged toward the candle, two fingers outstretched as if she were sending off a blast of fire. The girl opened her eyes to find the flame, still flickering playfully within the iron sconce. Azula stared into her pale hands and began to cry even harder. How had she not remembered that it had all been taken away from her? Her throne, her pride, her honor, and her bending were gone.

For what felt like an eternity, Azula stood watching the flame more intensely than before. The cell seemed to become smaller and smaller by the second, and the frightened prisoner let out a worried shriek. She was running out of time. Azula stood up straight and put on an artificial smile before speaking to the flame again. Large, warm tears still filled her eyes, and Azula felt a slight tickle as they rolled gently down her cheeks and off of the sides of her face. "Mother," she began quietly, "I'm sorr-" Before the girl could continue, an icy chill ran down her spine. Azula turned around to find a horrific sight. At the end of her cot sat her mother, adorned in the very finest silks nature could offer, the golden crown of the Fire Nation sitting daintily atop her head. The frightened young lady jerked her head towards the wall upon which the candle had been situated to find only the quiet darkness staring back at her. "What do you want?", screamed Azula.

"Nothing," replied the vision in a composed and indifferent tone, "I wouldn't want to miss my daughter's coronation now would I?" There was a deceitful hint of contempt in her mother's eyes. Azula gently wiped her eyes as she moved cautiously towards her cot. "Well?" inquired the vision, "Go ahead. Sit." Azula felt her stomach churn as she took a seat next to her mother.

"Why are you here?", asked Azula frightfully.

"I already told you, 'Zula.", smiled the Fire Lady, "I don't want to miss your big day." The broken princess felt her palms begin to sweat and her blood ran cold. This was too good to be true.

"Well,", replied Azula nervously, "Th-thank you, Mother."

"I do love you. I really do.", replied the vision.

"I-I love you too. Are you proud of me?" Azula wore an expression of utter desperation. There was a long pause before the vision spoke again.

"Oh, 'Zula.", said the vision dryly, "I am proud of many things. But you, my dear, are a monster. Look at yourself. Pathetic. You look like a peasant, with your eyes cast down! All you do is destroy things, just because they are standing." This caustic tone was all too familiar to Azula. "You're weak. And do you know why?" Azula felt the tears starting to come back. She placed both of her hands onto her head and began to scream curses on her mother. "I asked you a question!", yelled the vision.

"I don't know, Mother!", she yelled, "Why am I weak?"

"Because you are a lie. And nothing more. There is no coronation." Azula began to scream louder as she turned to look her mother in the eye for the first time since she had appeared in her cell, but the vision had disappeared. The crying wisp of a girl turned back toward the wall opposite her cot. Once again, the orange glow of the flickering candle mocked her with it's movements.

"Mother!", she begged, "I didn't mean to make you unhappy. I really didn't. I didn't meant to lie! I wanted you to be proud of me. Please come back!" The flame's dance persisted and the silence in the cell was unbroken. Azula curled herself into a ball upon her cot and began to rock back and forth, all the while crying for her mother to return.

The End.

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Messenger
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Messenger wrote a review Review · Sep 29, 2013

Knight Malachi here to review for team blue on Review Day.
So this was a very emotional, but very well done story. I could really envision everything because you used a lot of description, but not just description, but description AT THE RIGHT TIME. That is something important to do. No one wants a story with tons of pointless detail. Now, I don't know what ATLA means, but anyway this was still a good story.
It was a real hooker, and I could see it formed into a full book very easily. Very good job with just about everything. I didn't see any errors punctuation-wise, or other. Good job and happy Review Day.
Keep it up!

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OliveDreams wrote a review Review · Sep 29, 2013

Hello! I've come to be more nosey for Team Rouge and this amazing review day! I will provide you with a delightful review sandwich in just a jiffy :)

First things first, the things I liked;

“Azula's lips curled into an uneven frown and the light sting of hot tears filled her golden eyes.” - What beautiful description! I've been nagging all day for writers to add a little life into their characters descriptions so you're a breath of fresh air!

I think this is wonderfully written! No spelling mistakes and very few grammar problems. I love a checker before the post. I would just take a look at your paragraph lengths.

And now onto constructive criticism;

“I need to sleep," she thought, "Dr. Pho said I needed rest." - I would have used this line to start a new paragraph! You have pretty chunky ones so remember to separate your ideas coherently.

Good luck & keep writing!

Olive <3

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Vivian wrote a review Review · Sep 5, 2013

Hey... I kind of didn't know what ATLA meant until I heard Azula's name. I have to say this story is hilarious. It's hard to believe Azula's mother doesn't hate her and she's been taunting her all this time. Sad... You said in your blur there was another vision she was visited by but the only one known is the mother.And didn't she so claim to hate her mom?

Well anyways good story. It's nice to hear of a favorite show again especially this part of it. But how come no one came when she was screaming in most asylums or at least on TV and in books nurses come to restrain them.

dragonfphoenix wrote a review Review · Sep 2, 2013

Well, as an avid fan of ATLA [who felt totally stupid for not realizing that's what it stood for after having read the acronym's meaning previously], I found this very well-written, and it seemed to capture Azula's post-breakdown quite well. Seemed. I'm not a huge fan of fanfic because fanfic writers tend to throw in things that clash with what everyone was given in the 'official' story. Now, granted my predisposition for 'officialness' doesn't mean I didn't enjoy this, but that there were things we were never shown nor given a hint of being shown in the series. Example, the vision. In the series (so far as my memory serves me), Azula and Zuko's mother never spoke in any of the visions. Ever. And her mom was never portrayed as anything but this pure, innocent, soft-spoken and comforting woman. Not the haughty, condescending vision shown in this. Granted, a lot of that is probably Azula's mind fracturing her memories and causing the hallucination, but still...
And then the last paragraph was just an attempt to romanticize her. If she'd really been remorseful (of course she had her regrets in the series), then she would have 'turned good' in the series. But she was obsessed with power, and that's what broke her mind. At this point in her character development, she'd be so far gone she wouldn't even be able to form such complete, definitive thoughts. Even assuming that there were such psychologist in the ATLA universe, a month after her breakdown? She'd still be a total mess. Really, not trying to be mean (and I understand this is a fanfic), but therapy takes much longer than a month to kick in, even if it's daily.
I'm going to stop because I feel like I've just cut this thing to shreds and left it hanging to bleed out.
Hope this helps!

Oh it's fine. I take no offense to ur suggestion. Thanks for the feedback. But I'm pretty sure her mother did speak in the mirror scene. The reason I chose to portray this more condescending version of her mother was because most of the scenes she is shown in, if not all of them, were zuko's flashbacks and not hers. This would mean that they were biased in her favor, as her relationship with her son was much better. Azula however, carries a different set of feelings about her mother, and sees her in a completely different light. After all, a hallucination is an entirely self-driven thing. And yeah, this seems a bit too soon after her downfall....I can fix that easily. As for the remorse aspect, I see what you're saying. But my belief is that she sought absolute power in a futile attempt to fill the void left by her mother. Thanks for the review!!!



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