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Re: Strengths of the U.S. Constitution & Government System
The Messenger Knight here, and after reading Dragon's review I don't have a whole lot to fill this review with. :) Let me say that the revised first line is ...
Oct 17, 2013 -
Re: Lost in your words
The Messenger Knight here to review for your today, and for my KotGR. OK, so you don't have i capitalized every time that it is speaking about yourself. This is ...
Oct 17, 2013 -
Re: Rachel Rose
The Messenger Knight here to review for KotGr. I was really enjoying this until these spots where I noticed a few technical errors. I want to hold you close, never ...
Oct 17, 2013 -
Re: Basketball Heart
The Messenger Knight here to review for you, and KotGR. So, I really liked this piece. It was well written, and I liked how you transitioned from paragraph to poem ...
Oct 16, 2013 -
Re: Fantastical Book 1: The Mirror (Chapter Two)
The Messenger Knight here to review faithfully for KotGR. but they knew that nothing would help, only make things worse for them. I just feel like this line is wrong. ...
Oct 16, 2013 -
Re: No More
The Messenger Knight here to review your work for KotGR. Let's see what you got.:) No more avoiding the dark alleys No more running away from the shadows No more ...
Oct 16, 2013 -
Re: A Collection of Haiku
The Messenger Knight here to review for KotGR. So, I really liked this compilation, although fortis is right about the switch from beautiful nature, to all of a sudden these ...
Oct 14, 2013 -
Re: Days of Gold Gone By: Ep.Three
the Messenger Knight here to review for KotGR. first off lemme say Yay! for episode three, I am really enjoying this story. Behind the hall is a puddle of light, ...
Oct 14, 2013 -
Re: Drips of Blood
The Messenger Knight here to review for KotGR. So, I thought this was very beautifully written, and great description/imagery. But I think you need to be more descriptive in telling ...
Oct 14, 2013 -
Re: When My Life Took A Sudden Turn.
the Messenger Knight here to review for KotGR. And made me feel no special. I never showed off;My talent nor skill. Everyone has one, we all know, Until someone recognized ...
Oct 11, 2013 -
Re: My story.
The Messenger Knight here to review. So, I really, really, really liked this story/ life experience, but you had some big errors. 1. You have "i" all over the place, ...
Oct 11, 2013 -
Re: Start to a story - Nature's Finest
The Messenger Knight, here to review for KotGr. Julian sat admiring his Fathers blade; he admired the beautiful bronze hilt, This can be something you miss when writing, but using ...
Oct 10, 2013 -
Re: my story-baby dragons
The Messenger Knight here to review for KotGR. Well first off welcome to YWS, and hope you enjoy it bunches. Now, for your review. If dark lord is a character, ...
Oct 10, 2013 -
Re: What You've Done
The Messenger Knight here to review for you, and the KotGR> So, you got a small typo here:) in this cacophony, this vale Vale should be veil. I'm treading waters ...
Oct 10, 2013 -
Re: Disjointed Entanglements
The Messenger Knight here to review for KotGR. So I really liked this poem, and how you described words. Your description was beautiful, and the opposites Example on my dry ...
Oct 10, 2013