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Re: Mistake
One question: who is Nessy? One statement: generally when a piece requires an explanation at the bottom, there's something missing from the actual writing. One comment: having the line "Time ...
Nov 23, 2005 -
Re: Featherweight
I really like this. I love all the different elements in it that add to her emptiness and loss(the feather, the wind, etc) I don't think it's too short at ...
Oct 17, 2005 -
Re: Harry Potter & Inheritance- Opinions Wanted!!
Do we really have to compare them? They are both great series to me and I don't really think one is better than the other. True they are of the ...
Oct 15, 2005 -
Re: Western
Yeah you should. You have my attention. I need to know what happened to Samuel Thomas. From a grammar perspective I think your doing pretty well but I'm not picky ...
Oct 8, 2005 -
Re: The Classics- Recommendations
I'd recommend Picture of Dorian Grey, for that matter I'd recommend anything my Oscar Wilde. The Importance of Being Ernest is great. It's a play though. I don't know if ...
Sep 30, 2005 -
Re: a little something
Screenwriting is done for movies. They have to be very to the point so I think you'd do well. Yeah I thnk your romance writing is very good. I can't ...
Sep 23, 2005 -
Re: PaperCutt - Chapter 1
It's good but the sentence structure seems abrupt in places. It doesn't really have a flow. Also I would throw in some details. Like, does the maid have a French ...
Sep 21, 2005 -
Re: PaperCutt - Prologue
It was very good and very well written. I LOVE the imagery. I can see everything perfectly in my head. Or at least I think I can because I'll never ...
Sep 15, 2005 -
Re: Shakespeare
I read Romeo and Juliet, Macbeth, and Julius Ceasar. I read R&J in ninth grade and our english teacher had us rewrite the first scene of the first act into ...
Sep 15, 2005 -
Re: Lord of The Rings or Harry Potter?
I personally love both. But LOTR does take a while to get into and Tolkien tends to overdescribe EVERYTHING. It's very deep though and has a lot to it once ...
Sep 15, 2005 -
Re: Dark Redemption
I really like the three line intro thing. I think that the reader had no idea what's going on is what makes said reader want to read on and find ...
Sep 15, 2005
