Megrim

Hey there, this Review Day I've decided to dabble in some poetry! I don't really read or write poetry, so I have no idea what I'm talking about. Instead of ...

I haven't read the previous chapters, but I saw this in the green room so thought I'd chime in. Naturally I have no idea what's going on, but I pictured ...

Hello, Megrim here for Review Day! Your description says this is chapter two, but all I see is a prologue. Is chapter 1 somewhere? I woke this morning very early ...

Eerie start! Definitely has some spooky undertones. The nighttime, church with a single candle, ash and flames, all add to the atmosphere. I wasn't super sure who the MC is ...

Wow, this was fantastic! Setting really makes a story for me, and you've done the setting here excellently. It adds so much flavour to the story. It's an unusual setting ...

I enjoyed this, particularly the great way you've captured the setting with the crowded station and trains. I love trains and train stations so that endeared your story to me ...

Here again! It’s at that moment his shiny nametag catches the light just right and I see his name. “Major Toz Vedyo.” Nice!! Is she right? Have we surpassed the ...

Forward ho! The first entry here is fantastic. Very gripping. “It’s not breaking in—we have the key.” She could counter this by saying they'd still be trespassing, which is also ...

Hello again! Onward! Raymond laughed after the news finished and Alicia pulled into the school. “Someone’s gonna die,” he laughed, “Cat’s outta the bag.” I'm not sure what he means ...

Hi, back again now that it's the weekend! Let's see what happens, shall we? Mom and my first dad got divorced when I was eight and Raymond was four. The ...

Megrim here for the Big Review! I love the title! I haven't read this yet and will comment as I go. There we were, the three of us, standing at ...

Megrim here for the Big Review! Excited to actually review something of yours. I haven't read it yet and am going to comment as I go. The imagery in the ...

Hi Pretzel, Megrim here for the Big Review! I've seen you around so much I'm excited to actually review you for a change. And this sub is so recent, and ...

Hey there jumpingsheep, finally here to review as requested! I love the tone--there's a lot of voice to this piece. The first three lines were great. Very catchy, showing a ...

More poetry eh! Megrim here again for The Big Review, and like before, I better mention I have no clue how to write poetry, so the best I can give ...