Megrim

Haven't done a first read-through this time. Going to try writing down my thoughts as I go. CHAPTER 5 Watch out for over-use of specific words. The first paragraph has ...

Onward we go! You may find you get more reviews if you split the chapters into indvidiual submissions, as it's a lot to do at once. I think I'll mark ...

Hi there! I have a few thoughts for you to ponder. There are a number of spelling and grammar errors, but I'll leave those for others to cover, since I ...

Hi there! Here as requested. The major things that stood out to me were: - POV - Showing vs telling - Over-describing - Too many names all the time PROLOGUE ...

Hi there! I'm going to do a grammar and spelling review, because that looks like the biggest thing you need to work on. I'm going to go through line by ...

Haha, I love that last paragraph! A great introduction to the story. I agree with Apricity that you don't really need this as a prologue. When I write something like ...

I don't know much about plays, I'm afraid (*especially* the proper format and stuff, but whatever). But I am pretty good at dialogue, and plays are all about dialogue, so ...

Awwww :( Poor robot. Loved the piece. I'm always a fan of artificial AI as POVCs. I think it works wonderfully as a short story. It leaves a lot to ...

Hello! So I'll split this up into big thoughts and little thoughts. Big thoughts: The first question I found myself asking was where the fantasy element comes in. I don't ...

Interesting start! If you have more ideas for this, I say go for it! Some things to think about going forward... - How did the character get transported? Is it ...

Hey there, Megrim here for Review Day! I thought it would be fun and different to read a screenplay. I haven't written one before, so this is new territory for ...

Hey there, this Review Day I've decided to dabble in some poetry! I don't really read or write poetry, so I have no idea what I'm talking about. But I ...

Hey there, this Review Day I've decided to dabble in some poetry! I don't really read or write poetry, so I have no idea what I'm talking about. Instead of ...

Hey Megrim here, trying to review some poetry for a change! I don't really read or write poetry so I have no idea what I'm talking about, but hopefully I'm ...

Hey there, this Review Day I've decided to dabble in some poetry! I don't really read or write poetry, so I have no idea what I'm talking about. Instead of ...