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All is peaceful. The birds are singing, the insects buzzing. I can hear [s]the abbey babes, known as the [/s]Dibbuns[s],[/s] helping in the orchard. Anyone reading this record (or fic ...

It took me several tries to get into Inkeart , but it was definitely worth it. If you've had a hard time with it, try again. It's good. (I, too, ...

scasha, you had my hopes up for a second there because I thought you'd said it was by Scott Westerfeld, and I love his stuff. (Off topic, but So Yesterday ...

I think there's a lot of potential in the way this is set up, but not a lot of follow through. I really like the idea of the "are you ...

Dust is not God, and even though the fallen angel isn't omnipotent, that's the whole point. Why can't Dust be God? (Or, "the divine" as opposed to "God," which has ...

I like the idea, but it's not exactly a new one - nor did I find it particularly well worded. Instead of going with the most obvious interpretation, try exploring ...

The key in my hand dropped to the hard cement with a slight ringing sound. I like the imagery you're getting at in this sentence, but I feel like you ...

I'd like to point you all in the direction of Killing the Imposter God , a book about the theology of His Dark Materials . It argues that the Authority ...

[s]Her body[/s] She lay curled on her side, [s]her[/s] head resting on her arm as rays of light warmed her skin. As Suzette already pointed out, this sentence needs work. ...

Hm, this was kind-of bland as poems go. I didn't see any particularly interesting ideas or wordpay or anything; it was just a standard emo poem. So, what can you ...

Laura looks good in pink, s he reminds of [s]a[/s] bubble gum [s]that's[/s] - gone in just [s]one[/s] a wink. To not eat her up would be such [s]i[/s] a ...

I liked the first section much better than the rest of it, because there was some sort of coherent rhyme scheme. I feel like the second stanza is the one ...

Well, it's kind of boring. I really like clockwork/clock makers, especially if there is steampunk (or clockpunk) involved, so I guess I kind-of had my hopes up. This was a ...

Ryan sounds pretty much exactly like Lestat, only apparently, not dead. I'm a Lestat fangirl, myself, and there's nothing wrong with having a love interest that hot, but the fact ...

First off: I got nothin' against short poetry. I'm all about short poetry. I think that it can be done well, but this just doesn't do it. Have you ever ...