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Whoa, it takes a really deplorable creature to attack a pregnant woman, especially one so advanced in her pregnancy. I assume that his culpability is diminished by alcohol? I hope ...

Hi there! I'll try to be of some help if I can. Well, this was a short piece, too short in my opinion. There was no defining climax/resolution, just little ...

Hi there! :) She filled in the gap between us with just a few steps, and I wasn't expecting it, but didn't protest when she... -------------------------------------------------------------------------

Reading this story made me want to puke rainbows :) I think the story would be improved if you add more background to it, more development of her relationship with ...

That was a pleasant read, I liked how the persona's age coincided with winter, alluding to the 'end'. It's certainly refreshing to read a story about love in old age ...

Unique writing style, I like it! Admittedly, your characters are the kind of people I get annoyed with in real life :P 2 errors I found that haven't been pointed ...

Oh dear, so much for any constructive comments :P I really liked this piece, which also seems mostly without errors (I can't help you much with punctuations, teehee) It's an ...

Aww, this is really sad and I hope your friend's sister gets well eventually. The emotions can be more strongly felt by readers if you lengthen the story with descriptions ...

Hi there, I haven't reviewed in quite some time, so bear with me if I sound amateurish :P I noticed 2 things you should probably work on before you progress ...

Hi again Shubhi! I'll get straight to the nit-picking, kay? (CHAPTER-2) JOSH BURTON 26th June, 2009 12:57 AM “Eureka! I have found it at last,” I roared with excitement waking ...

Hey Shubhi! :D I'll just get straight down to business: 1) I would italicise Olivia's thoughts, if I were you, to make it clearer for the readers. Maybe add a ...

Hey Shubhi! Wow, this piece has already been throroughly nit-picked, so I shall just give me general comments. 1) Description: Like peanut has said, prologues can be descriptive. I'm guessing ...

Egads, you must practically worship this girl, judging by the shameless flattery in this poem. I guess it works for some girls, but I personally prefer less cheesy content :) ...

Umm... Okay, firstly, the format of the story comes in bizzare blocks so you'll need to rearrange that. Secondly, you ought to work on your punctuation. You're short of commas ...

Hey Ella_Mercy! :) As with the first chapter, I have no qualms with the writing quality of this piece. One thing though, I would suggest italicising the three "I love ...