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In most light novels, which is what I am basing this on, they don't really set a focused goal so much as present a world for the protagonist to survive ...

It's kinda slow to be honest, mostly because the plot started out with the protagonist getting used to their new body, which is still going on. So balancing that with ...

:D Thank you for all your thoughts~

Thank you so much for the review, it's gonna help me plenty moving forward~

It was fun for me to write! But the point of that statement was not to control how you as the reader feel, but to present how the protag feels. ...

She spent a lot of time planning this appearance? When? A portion of the first chapter explains how David wasted hours planning out the looks of Avery/Mist Which pattern from ...

Also as a sidenote, I'd love it if you could italicize the thoughts, just to better separate it from the rest of the story. This is just a preference, so ...

I'm a little confused here. The squealing bullet thing is a reference to last chapter where Mist tried to copy the shape of a bullet. The result, is something that ...

Ah, since your reviewing a bunch, do you have any suggestions? Good novels that don't have many reviews?

Thanks for pointing out the tense switching, I wanna stick to present tense, but I keep mistakenly switching. Does she not want people to remember her face because she might ...

Oh I misunderstood the question, she/he assumed the magic would be easy as a video game to use, click something and have it all solved and answered in a few ...

P.S, Curse shows off her ears and exposes Avery's ears within the other party members view without them reacting much, yes they are aware of Curse also being a half ...

I remember that when she picked it, she wasn't really sure what it was, so why would she all of a sudden know how to use it when she got ...

I meant the little girl thing literally, as in the character is short. I'm 16, clearly I am an adult and everything.

Thank you for your detailed thoughts and suggestions, and i am happy to hear you like it so far~ I wanted to give you some idea about who he was, ...