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This is a great period story. I like how it's told from the point of view of a young girl. Journals are very good for this sort of story. One ...

Okay, firstly, this is really interesting. I like the idea and definitely think you could do something with it. You need to be extremely careful, though because you are addressing ...

Wow. I'm impressed. You played that very, very well. It was such a nice, slow build-up to the revelation that he was a book! I had no idea he wasn't ...

This was a very nice story, simple and to the point. I really enjoyed it. I think I'm going to have to settle for nitpicking grammar, because I don't really ...

I really, really like this. It's such a unique perspective on the life of a leaf. I especially like how, even though it is only one paragraph long and about ...

Okay. You have a good start here. You say this is your first time writing original fiction - I'm impressed! You seem to have a good story lined up. However, ...

Wow, I'm enjoying this! I especially like the vivid imagery of the colors. It fits really well with her dealing with the loss of her mother. I also like how ...

It's hard to review an incomplete story - I don't know what you're going to explain later. I'll give it a shot, though. I read your first two parts before ...

Okay, this has some serious potential. I'm expecting a sequel soon! It seems like a prologue to a book. What are your plans for it? Things I liked: The incantation. ...

This is very good! I quite enjoyed it. Is there going to be more? It's especially interesting since it's from the mother's point of view. Your descriptions of the state ...

So, first of all, I like your premise. It's an interesting take on vampires, and you've definitely got a good start. A few issues: 1. Exposition. You have 7-8 long ...