McDanny

Good to see we're so cheerful today. There were a few points I especially liked, the 'constant drawl of tension' and last line in particular. However, there are a couple ...

Good day, my name's Dan and I'll be your reviewer today :) I can see immediately that this is not the sort of story I would normally read; it's a ...

This is going to seem a little savage, so brace yourself, and I apologise in advance: I had no clue really what was going on, the romantic dialogue was rather ...

I'm not sure if this was intended in a rather satirical way or if you actually have some deep-seated grudge against kelp and I'm meant to take it seriously. In ...

I'm going to be completely honest; I only read the first couple of paragraphs before noticing how long it was and remembering I had other important stuff to do this ...

G'day, I'm McDanny, and this is the part where I dispense totally unfair criticism towards your work. I was quite impressed with the amount of action and story you managed ...

I'm not sure what to make of it, mostly due to the length. It's looking good so far, but it would have been nice to have seen a bit more ...

I'm not quite sure where you're going with this; so far it's got some good ideas but no real plot construction (which, considering it's only the first chapter, is to ...

A great idea and a powerful message, but it could be presented with a little more clarity. My main issue is that occasionally it gets clouded by cod-Confucian philosophy, and ...

So far it's looking good, but I don't feel I've seen enough of the story to make a proper assessment. However, just a few things I need to point out; ...

My initial reaction was 'oh dear, another soppy love poem' but after I had read it through properly, I began to get a feel of what the narrator was going ...

It may just be me going senile but, beautiful and poetic some of the description is, it was easy to get confused about what was happening at some points. But ...

Whatever happened to constructive criticism, Space? I also don't see how you can tell anyone to spell better when you said a moment before it was 'plane bad'. Anyway, I ...

Well my birth name is Daniel White (before I got it hyphenated recently) so you can imagine my surprise at reading the main character's name. Anyway, as much as I ...

I liked this, but I do have some reservations about it. As I think someone else has already mentioned, it did feel as if I was just reading the middle ...