Master_Yoda

You're right HopelesslyandIrrevocably, this truly is a weird piece. Personally, I have to say, I didn't really find it appealing, and I think the reason for this is that the ...

Hi there Mars, I have to say the idea of this story was exceptionally intriguing. You took the story of Cinderella, and aimed to make us question the validity of ...

Hi there Vivacious I really like this start. I'm not sure how, but you have succeeded in amusing me with both your writing, and your tale. There are a couple ...

Hi there lil' Piggy Firstly, I'd like to start off by congratulating you on your idea. Imagine, a portal between hell and our world, that would be pretty scary, so ...

Hi there, OverEasy, You have succeeded in letting us know your character in a very short time, yet to be perfectly honest, I didn't really find this piece to be ...

Hi WaterVyper, I really enjoyed the piece. Here are a couple of tips that I hope will help: The wind whips through soft and smooth, just like silk The above ...

red rug. i was given a big house, a big house with many trapped doors. many trapped doors were i could hide The first thing I have to comment on ...

Well, there isn't much to critique around here. I really enjoyed the poem. The candid way that you refer to death, creates a strong progression, and somehow magically draws the ...

Hi Kitty15 Firstly, I want to compliment you on your writing, as it is in fact, in my humble opinion spectacular. Here are a series of nitpicks. Hopefully they will ...

Hello Before I even begin my review, I'd like to suggest that you give us a little more information regarding the world. You have thrown us into the action of ...

Hi Lukas 8u I have attatched a .doc file with an edited version of your story. I enjoyed it very much, and feel that it has a lot of potential. ...

Hi there, Here are my two cents on the story: Moonlight pierced through the cloudless night sky to illuminate the small, deciduous forest around the silhouette. He walked slowly along ...

Hi Mia, Just so you know, there is a rule here about posting two reviews before posting a piece of your own work. Its also advised that a ratio of ...

Wow CastlesInTheSky, I don't really know what to say. This is really overwhelming. From beginning to end, your writing kept me glued to my seat. You writing is so beautiful; ...

Hi Sofi, I'm not sure if he would have read Lance Armstrong's book -- It's not About the Bike: My Journey Back to Life, but its a really nice book, ...