Mars

Holy [expletive] This stunned me. It was touching, and cute, sometimes, and a bit creepy (in a good way) and I really shouldn't be surprised since you're the author but ...

Wow, short and sweet. I have a couple things to point out, but overall it's pretty good. :) When I was six years old I dropped a glass plate on ...

Well, this doesn't need tearing apart. I actually liked it a lot-could only find one thing to nit-pick: I take to sitting underneath my attic window, I don't like how ...

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I don't have a lot to say, since Face Engine pretty much said it all already. I agree with him. It's a good poem, but not remarkable. The only thing ...

I liked this a lot--can't really say anything that hasn't already been said :D Except, I assume you did this while reworking it, it should be shift of an eye.

I liked this a lot. It gets a gold star. I really don't have any suggestions--your descriptions are beautiful, especially the guy's eyes, and I was afraid the fire part ...

This poem was okay but too repetitive-you're repeating the same things over and over without changing more than two or three words, and I found it a little tiresome to ...

Sorry-reading it again I realize my first post was really vague. No, I got what the first two were. I thought by "imaginary relationships" you meant something like imaginary friends, ...

I like this poem-it's kind of an overused subject, so you have to make it original and I think you did a good job of that. Stained by her black, ...

Actually, I like your dialogue. This is realistic fiction, so you should portray your characters realistically (which you do). Part two! Yes! Here are a few suggestions (mostly writing or ...

I really liked this poem! Mostly I loved the imagery. There were a couple things I didn't understand (it's probably just me :P): When the sun rises, I think it's ...

Hello! I really liked this piece. I would tell you to continue it but you said you will! Also, this being the introduction, it's kind of hard to critique the ...

Haha. I have been in this exact situation. Good job! It was really interesting. You made Cassidy a really strong character (I see her clearly, the band, red hair, kind ...

Well. It's not bad for two minutes, but honestly.. it's not good. I am shot with a thousand arrows... Going right through my still beating heart, This line is not ...