Mars

Hey! Sorry it took me so long to get to this. Um, also, I'm lazy and not reading the above reviews, so forgive me if I repeat anything. The blood ...

Okay, sonnets = win. I had to review this. Basically, I see some rhythm imperfections. Like dearest Cousin Ben - the way I'm reading it, it's too many syllables, and ...

Hey! Mars here to review. Let's get started, shall we? *** When the sun slowly falls, and the silver moon may rise, I escape into the night and dream about ...

Hiyas! I'm Mars, ready to review. First of all, I hope those are not your titles (A Girl Who's Been Cheated and Anger), just because I don't think that either ...

Heya, Moriah Leila! Here as you requested. First of all, the grammar isn't completely up to par. Mostly, you're missing a few commas, and there was one place where I'm ...

'Allo Persnikety! I hope you don't mind if I review this for ya? ... Didn't think so. Let's go! *dives into The Marble Horse* Mom’s voice was airy as she ...

She was sure she’d seen him before, somewhere on campus, but couldn’t place him definitely. Are you...continuing the flashback from the previous part? That would make sense. It would work, ...

Huzzannah, I might not have too much to say about this, except, stop making me jealous with you prose talent. Srsly. :P Okay so anyway: (though it caused her untold ...

What's this? A critique? Get rid of your first line, 'cause it sucks. JUST PLAYIN. I LOVE IT. Okay. For reals now. I promise. a girl that'd make me feel ...

Hi Jessica! Here I am. I'll start out kind of nitpicky, comments in bold, and then tell you my overall impressions of the piece. How come the stars never fail ...

Why should grammar matter? To answer your question as to why it's important: a couple of reasons. First of all, it helps you become a better writer. Kind of a ...

Hey Alpha! I must say, this piece has a load of potential. I love the way you foreshadowed with the man in the movie theatre, and then threw in the ...

Liz! Hello! I decided that I couldn't not see what you were writing. So, here I am! And as everyone's noticed, there are a few typos that could be easily ...

Hello TSun! I'll begin to really review your piece in a mo, but I do have to agree that grammar is important. I know, I know, I hate being bothered ...

Hello Minimac! I'm going to review this, but I'm afraid it might be a bit short, as there's not much to critique! As dd9 said, you really did portray the ...