Alcohol

I liked it! Wonderful job! As the others said, you did a great job of the feeling of addiction.

Wherever it is, I interfere.
You hear my siren song calling:
Your friend 'wine' here

This is my favorite line, the figurative language you use with the siren call is great. My other favorite part about this is the way the narrator is the alcohol. Great writing and keep that pen scribbling (or should I say keys clacking?)

Hmm I don't really know what to say because this was really good!But Ive got to do two reviews so here it goes lol. You described alcohol perfectly where it says "Make you laugh, make you fight" it's exactly what alcohol does. I think it would be better if you didn't say the word alcohol because obviously we know what it's about so maybe you should just keep some mystery?
It's just a suggestion though.
Jessica x

Errr, "wine"? That's the best source of alcohol you can think of?

Wine wouldn't be the best "lure" personally. Tequilla would be better...something potent that you only need a little of.

Hello Minimac! I'm going to review this, but I'm afraid it might be a bit short, as there's not much to critique! As dd9 said, you really did portray the personality of alcohol well. I can just imagine it in a dark alley, beckoning you with its finger....yeah. So, let's get started!

"It's alcohol here."
This isn't really a criticism. It's just, wouldn't it be cool if you didn't write alcohol, but instead a euphemism for alcohol? (A euphemism is a metaphor for something, which makes the something sound better than it really is). Like, instead of alcohol, ambrosia or elixir of life or even just the names of the alcohol, like wine, beer, gin, vodka. Because the word alcohol, for me, at least, automatically triggers bad. liver damage. addiction. And alcohol wouldn't want you think that! It wants you to think that it's good! So...yeah.

Oh, and the last line I thought was a little odd. I get what you mean, and I know you had to rhyme, but would you really say 'your free will I'll cut?' I think it undermines the rest of the poem a little bit, because the rest is written in simple, straightforward, non-inverted language, so this didn't fit.

Anyway, this piece was great! Just consider editing it a little and it will be greater! PM me if you have any questions.

This poem portrays very well the seductive personality of alchol. I think this poem is really good, and have only a few critiques.

Wherever you go, you hear me,

I’ll take all the pain and misery away.

I’ll be all you’ll think about.

Dawn or dusk. Day and night.

Then the trap I snap shut.

Your free will I cut.