Markontheworld

Hey, Pattern! I loved the thoughts in this, but I'm still a little confused. First is this supposed to be a poem or a story, because it doesn't exactly feel ...

Don't really know where to begin with this, but I'll try. It's a very emotional piece, and that's what I love about it. It's also what what made it a ...

Alright, where to start? Well first off I liked your theme, the person was degrading and belittling themselves, and blaming it on 'voices'. In reality it's just their guilt for ...

Wow. There so many things I could say about this. Deep, is the first that comes to mind, bold is another. You list all theses awful crimes against humanity they ...

Ohhhhhhh now I see how the other one's a prequel! This one's pretty cool to, though. A few mistakes here and there, like in your last stanza you wrote "And ...

Hey, hey it's eleven eleven when I'm writing this, so make a wish! No, but in all seriousness I liked it. I liked how you had like just the right ...

Most intriguing, I must admit. However, I'm gonna go out on a limb, and say that this isn't just about the devil's sly ways. But instead about people who you ...

Interesting, I like it! A little confusing towards the end, but I get it. It seems almost like a warning. Like the dark side of the human mind. How are ...

Hi! You're knew on the site, right? If so, welcome to the epicness that is YWS! Okay now, on to your story! First off of I said I didn't like ...

Yes!!! Flubbing awesome piece of work you got here. I feel like the person talking has suffered from some sort of abuse from her love. It kind of reminds me ...

Intriguing is the first word that poped into my head after I finished reading this. I feel like you could've gone deeper into detail, but for your first poem on ...

Well I really like you writing style, the detail I mean, and the story seems pretty cool so far as well. However, I felt there were some parts that were ...

Sup Doc! Terrence on marjuanna! Even though I did not see that coming by a long shot I can't say I'm too surprised. At least that's what half of me ...

This was most definately an interesting take on the lady or the tiger. When my class read it I was literally the only one who still believed that the princess ...

I like the idea for the story, but I think it needs to be better spaced, and spell checked. Also I feel like it needs more of a discription, like ...