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Maia

Maia

  • Poetry » Realistic, General Re: The Three Little Girls and the Big Bad Society.

    Hey! I really liked this poem, it's really sad but beautifull at the same time. The title, the first line 'Once upon a time' and the last line " and ...

    Apr 25, 2014
  • Poetry » Literature, General Re: Reading is My Remedy

    Wow that is beautiful! The rythm is great for the first verse but the second verse I found a bit stop-starty (if that's a word). The rythm sort of started ...

    Dec 11, 2013
  • Poetry » General, General Re: Friend or Foe?

    This is a really nice poem, it is a good subject that you question: Is time a friend or foe? The only suggestion I would make is for the last ...

    Oct 13, 2013
  • Poetry » General, General Re: What I Am

    I was captivated by this poem, it is just utterly brilliant! I like how you repeat the line: "I am not just a body" Over and over again throughout the ...

    Oct 12, 2013
  • Short Story » Narrative, General Re: ​How a waitress's smile saved a life

    I really like this story. All it takes is a smile from a waitress and a kind word which I think is really sweet. I think that it would have ...

    Oct 12, 2013
  • Short Story » Realistic, General Re: My story.

    This is a really good piece! When you say I, it's like you're talking to us and it makes it really engaging. I particularly like the first three paragraphs and ...

    Oct 12, 2013
  • Poetry » General, General Re: Grades don't equal you.

    I would like to start by saying that this is one of the most beautiful poems I have ever read. It is so elegant how each line is so short ...

    Oct 10, 2013
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Take our bones, make us new

    Wow! This is a really good poem. The rhyming is good and even until the end, and that makes it stand out more. Most of the lines are of the ...

    Oct 10, 2013
  • Poetry » Narrative, Realistic Re: Just some Somebody.

    Maia here! This is a really touching poem, you have really captured the sadness of a soldiers death and the morning of those who knew him. Your rhyming is a ...

    Sep 29, 2013
  • Poetry » Realistic, Mystery / Suspense Re: Church Bells

    This is a really good poem. I find it really cool how you have associated the church bells and the guns. I think you should put some more punctuation in ...

    Sep 29, 2013


The thing about plummeting downhill at fifty miles an hour on a snack platter - if you realize it's a bad idea when you're halfway down, it's too late.
— Rick Riordan, The Son of Neptune