MagnusBane

I love those books! Jace is my favorite character ever. I would marry him in a heartbeat. :) Clary wasn't half bad either. I have those books where the hero ...

Ooh, creepy ending! I really, really liked this whole piece, especially the beginning paragraph and the last sentence. The only thing that I didn't like was that most of the ...

I've been a bit disappointed by some of the stories people are posting on YWS lately, but yours was great. The characterization was very strong, and I really like Asher. ...

Wow! What a beginning! I would definitely like to read more. Some prologues practically give away the entire story, but yours didn't, and I liked that. You definitely left me ...

The shining white mare beneath him flew across the rolling plains with its ivory mane flowing in the rushing wind. Rowan drove is heels into the horse’s sides and whipped ...

I agree with Aqua. It's great to be creative with fan fiction, but you've taken the characters too far away from the way they were supposed to be. Could you ...

Two words for you: Slow down. This has the beginnings of a great story. It's engaging to read and really creative. But it goes way too fast. You don't really ...

Hi irishfire! I'll be reviewing your story today. I was going to get all of the grammar and spelling mistakes out of the way first, but there were so many ...

I was so mad that Meggie went for Daria instead of Farid! I mean, come on! Farid can play with fire! He is so much more epic than boring old ...

It was like nothing I've ever read. Talk about original. The way the author did the main character's voice was amazing. Although, I was really upset about the dog dying. ...

The same stupid song plays whenever he texts me. And every time I hear it, I quickly press ‘ignore’ and hope you get the hint. You never will, will you? ...

She made him keep the dog outside in zero degree weather? That is such animal cruelty! Your character had better find a way to get that poor puppy inside, or ...

Well, I guess it could be a good idea. The beginning isn't anything special, though, to be honest. When I read it I get the feeling that I've already read ...

Nice. You should definetely use this as a NaNoWriMo. The only problem I saw was at the very top of the page. Hi there! This is an entry into the ...

His legs were now a fish tail. Her boyfriend is a... mermaid? I moved my hands so tears could fall down my skin uninterrupted. Her boyfriend just grew scales, and ...