MadameX

Very good. Really, its better than I could do, so I feel a little bad sayin that I have couple nitpicks. First, the middle section (5-10, approx.) was really nice. ...

You have a very good first verse here, and I'm going to have to agree with Evi in saying teenage angst/depression is a really hard poem to write because of ...

I like how you chose to express yourself in this poem--audible instead of visual characteristics are a nice change. I'm going to go against the crowd and say that I ...

I like the subject you're persuing in this poem, but I'm sorry to say the rhyme just does not work for me. First, this is too short a poem for ...

This had a really great flow, and there aren't any grammer mistakes or typos that I see (gaureented, I'm writing this at midnight by the light of my laptop screen, ...

This is my first fiction review, so please excuse me if I don't hit on something! Firstly, I found this interesting. Not perfect-- but interesting, so good job there. You ...

This is a good start, but the repition is really, really annoying (trust me, when I started writing poetry I did the exact same thing). Also, i will agree with ...

This is too long. I sense the emotions coming through, but you've just got too much and it comes off as angsty rather than poignant. Cut out everything you don't ...

I will have to third that herky-jerky comment about the poem. Really, you need to condense some lines. This short stuff really says little, and all your doing is stretching ...

Well, you've certainly got better rythmn than I do, that's for sure. Really, good job on this. My only complaint is that the reader rather tumbles through it--slow down the ...

I like the voice in this poem. Its quirky, and slightly cynical, especially in the beginning. I wish that your last verses, whcih feel slightly stale and cardboard by comparison, ...

This was a good poem already, but it feels heavy and bogged-down in the multitudes of disease/dirty images you're throwing at the reader. Does each line need to be so ...

Quite honestly (and I really am sorry if this sounds cruel) I didn't feel much for this poem. There is nothing to hang on to--no metaphors, imagery, or really even ...

I like this poem at lot, actually (i was thinking I wouldn't from the title, but I was surprised). There were a few things that bugged me, though. First off, ...

I think you have a really good start here, but it could use some touching up. First off, I'm not sure I like that you have punctuation at the end ...