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Re: Bag of Green Grapes
Funny how so many things around us are humorous without trying to be. The poem was quaint. I think if you really wanted to make this a good poem and ...
Mar 5, 2008 -
Re: Untitled
Yes, I wondered that as well. No matter what it is, it's still cliche. Just listening to my favorite CD, my favorite band, I hear so many songs basically singing ...
Mar 5, 2008 -
Re: Accident
I liked that a lot. Very, very, very demented. The last line really packed the punch. It really emphazied what you were trying get across. I really have no clue ...
Jan 19, 2008 -
Re: Last Place
Wow, you seem to be posting a lot of stories lately. You really should do some more reviewing (even though your post-review ratio is better than mine) I agree with ...
Jan 18, 2008 -
Re: DO NOT RED
Okay, what is up with this poem? I didn't even finish this poem simply because you kept switching between first person and third person. Not to sound rude but that ...
Jan 18, 2008 -
Re: There
Hey, I've read a lot of your stuff lately. I'm getting used to your writing style. I like the repetition, it really emphaized the point you wanted to get across. ...
Jan 18, 2008 -
Re: Over White Sands
Hey, I liked your poem. Very well written, and may I say somewhat creepy. You really have no clue what's happening. It really makes you think. But, I can't possibly ...
Jan 17, 2008 -
Re: w00t
The title alone got me to read it. "w00t" is a really good title simply because chatspeak is rarely used in good writing. Well, somewhat good writing. I felt that ...
Jan 17, 2008 -
Re: A l o n e
Okay, I hate to break it to you, but this isn't very good as those above me have said. I felt it conveyed a emotion fairly well, but the writing ...
Jan 17, 2008 -
Re: You Gonna Eat That?
I agree with Azila. This piece was quite short and more like a joke than a story. If you want this to be a story, elaborate so more. Do something ...
Jan 16, 2008 -
Re: The Wind
This is a really good poem. Kind of creepy. The main concept of this story is very well portrayed. But you want to know what killed it? The repetition. Like ...
Jan 12, 2008 -
Re: Sonnet #1
Your poem was, well, choppy. I know poetry can be written any way you choose, but this was a bit to odd (For lack of a better word.) Maybe you ...
Jan 12, 2008 -
Re: My Knight in Epitome Armor
That was really good. I'm not much for love story poems, but your poem changed my view on them. I actually read it about 10 times to find any mistakes. ...
Jan 12, 2008 -
Re: 12 Shocks of Christmas, Pt. 1
A very interesting story. I really enjoyed it. Christmas horror story. My god it sounds like I wrote it! I have to disagree with most people on saying the "partridge ...
Jan 12, 2008 -
Re: [deleted]
I felt this piece terribly disjointed and, dare I say, random. The flow, well, there was no flow other than the river you were talking about (heck I don't even ...
Jan 11, 2008
