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First off, I want to say I read your poem and liked the first line. After that, though, it began to seem forced - and that's not good. My comments ...

I liked this quite a bit, but I found a certain lack of flow because of the five-line, four-line, five-line stanzas. Also, as one point you say They'll protect me. ...

Hello there. I'm here to critique your work and I apologize if I sound harsh. I'll comment throughout the poem in bold, and edit as I see fit, always pointing ...

Er... I'm hoping this is fiction? XD Anyways, I'm in an editing mood, so I'll edit this for you if you don't mind. comments at the end, my comments throughout ...

Alright, so this is a nice poem, however some of the punctuation, et cetera, is a bit... wrong. Here, I'll help you. Great idea, perfect comparison between some plastic girls ...

This is a wonderful poem! I have no criticism of it; all I see is the beauty of your writing and the emotions that are felt as I read this ...

The only real problem I see with your poem is the rhyme scheme. Stick to a strict pattern when rhyming, or don't rhyme at all. I don't see anything too ...

He could smell the dawn’s approach; soon, dew would be falling upon the grass, the cicadas would cease their nocturnal song, and the sun would break over the horizon. The ...

Hello, This is a wonderful, powerful poem, however it seemed as though nothing really... I don't know how to explain it. Nothing really happened , if you understand what I ...

Hello there! I'm here to help critique your poem. As far as it goes, when I first read it, I thought, "Well, that was dull." And it is true. This ...

All right, all in all, I enjoyed this poetry, though there was one thing I didn't understand: It says, "We knew he would die", and then it says, "I lie ...

I don't understand anything in this story. I'm sorry to be harsh, but what in the world were you thinking? It could be SO much better! Where did the knife ...

Okay, I'll give an overview at the end. Bold are spelling mistakes/grammatical errors. Italics are just me pointing things out. [s]Strikethroughs[/s] are words that shouldn't be there. Befor before la

Wow! I really enjoyed this! Here are a few... suggestions. This messes up the whole rhyming scheme. Try to make all of the rhyming schemes the same. You did doubles ...

What is this poem about? Chapped Eating the dandruff scabs off my head my eyes are watering from nonexistent onions or emotions always there is a pipe cleaner constricting my ...