I'm So Full Of It

I really liked this poem, the flow was good. Really good.

I like the idea of your poem, but I think in some parts the rhyming does seem a little forced.
Sorry that's all I have to say!

I love this, it totally brings out another side of poetry which reminds us that there are so many different styles and that each person has there very own style. The way your poem changes its flow from a very fast to just fast and so on can get a little tricky sometimes but the way you did it wokred perfectly:) it fitted in with the sort of attitude given off from the poem( not that it is a bad one, its not, its really good to show some spunk if you know what i mean). keep it upw:)
-Niko

First off, I want to say I read your poem and liked the first line. After that, though, it began to seem forced - and that's not good. My comments are in bold.

I’m Full of lies, teary eyes, long sighs, kisses goodbye,
I’m Full of the night sky and the silence passing by. I don't like this line. It puts everything off track.
I’m Full of self defense and nonsense, with the suspence Spelling! and expence Spelling! of every intense offense. I enjoyed the beginning of this line, up until nonsense. After that, it seemed too pushy with all of the rhyming.
I’m Full of good combacks, some tic tacs, but we’re off track
because those are the things i do lack.I don't like this at all. At all. It doesn't make sense and it's also pushy with the rhyming.
I’m Full of lucky charms harvesting What do you mean by "harvesting"? Perhaps "feeding" would be more suitable, if you're talking about the Lucky Charms cereal? a witty soul who doesnt Apostrophe! give a darn,
I’m full of self harm whose unarmed. Self-harm and unarmed are opposite, and do not lend themselves to each other.
I’m Full of myself, and self help to self wealth, Uh... What do you mean by self help to self wealth? Once again, forced rhyming is visible.
taking pride in oneself because saying we did it ourself doesnt Spelling! Apostrophe! make me feel well. This is unneeded. It does nothing for your poem.
I’m Full of you, dragon tattoos, and shirts that are see through, I actually like this, as it shows more of the narrator shining through.
I’m Full of Jimmy Choos, but these things you knew and arent new. Oh man... just no. It doesn't work, I'm sorry to say.
I’m full of muffled cries, a sneaky disguise, but its no suprise. Maybe end with something more like, "so it's no surprise that I'm Full of Lies", instead of this and the next line.
I’m Full of Lies.

Oh my gosh this poem is absolutely amazing I loved it! I think the flow and the rhyme scheme is perfect and I love how you put so much of yourself into something that everyone can relate to. Simply brilliant. Very creative and very individual!

I’m Full of you, dragon tattoos, and shirts that are see through,

I’m Full of lies, teary eyes, long sighs, kisses goodbye

i’m full of self harm whose unarmed.