Lydia1995

Love it!! :D

Genius! :D

Thank You Storm :D

Thank you all for your comments :D ThePowerOutrage thank you for your comments, I will try to include some more metaphors and similes in the next draft :D Galerius thank ...

Thank you for all of your comments, I will keep them in mind and edit it this but I will post it as a different topic so that this one ...

Glad I helped Maddy :D GOod Luck with your editing, PM me if you decide to post it up and I'll review it for you.

Yep sure thing Midnightread. :D And thanks for reading.

Thanks Jabber, I had a major problem with trying to keep it young without losing the perception of certain things like the candle. I will work on that and see ...

Thanks Coco. I am still unsure where this is going to leave, I need to do a plot line or something. But thanks for the review. I might cut out ...

Thanks for your comments Jmim and TenYo, I have edited the spacing a little. But I am going to leave the 'in heaven on high' because as TenYo said, it ...

This is genius :D Well Done, I havn't laughed so much in a long time :L *Likes* Keep Writing ~Lydia

Europe, nice. I can see why you'd miss Zimbabwe though, Europe must be a little dull after that :D

Hello again! Much like what the person above said, you do a bit too much telling. But other than this I think its going to be a good read, I ...

Thank you everyone for your commments, I will go away, re-draft and re-post :)

Juni Thanks for the ideas, actually it's a train crash but hey its very similar :P I'll work on that and try and post it up soon :)