Lydia1995

Hello Scott Welcome to YWS! I liked your poem, it was very original and cleverly written. I actually couldn't find anything to nit-pick with this so that is great! On ...

Hello Timmy, I like this, it is original and holds its own on this site which is great! It was a nice refreshing break from some of the usual stuff ...

Hello! It thought that this was a very interesting subject to write a poem with. Hmmm. I think that the rhyme here... Kick the ball at the goal Don't hide ...

Hello! I really liked this, it was short and sweet. I can see what others mean about the need to expand a little on the relationship between the narrator and ...

Hello! I really liked this, I can see why you attached it, the formatting looks great by the way :D I read it like a metronome as you said and ...

Hello Bugwhisker! Welcome To YWS by the way :D Ok, so I can't really review this in terms of the characters and the plot etc, because there isn't enough there ...

Hello, This was great, a very nice funny read :) Just a tip, you don't need to rhyme every line, you can have poetry without any rhymes and you may ...

Hello Torigirl I agree with everyone else, the ending seemed a little melodramatic and I wanted to 'see' what was going on rather than hear that she was 'suffocating and ...

Hello! I have to say that it was the title of this that drew me in. But there wasn't much mention of Gravity in the actual poem. This was alright ...

Hello Kate, I loved this, your description of what dishwashers do was really interesting. I have never really thought of it that way before. I, unlike Snoink, like the repetition ...

Hello, Firstly I would like to say that this is very original paticularly with the watermelon and it was the title that cought my eye. I really liked it, I ...

This is great! I love the lines in brackets, some of the most classic lines in poetry on this site that I have ever seen. Come to think of it, ...

Hello WolfDaemon! I'm Lydia and I will be your reviewer for today. I am interested to see where this piece will go, I think you should write more and carry ...

Hello, As Captain Classy said, this is a very good poem, but it does need a quick proof-read and a few rough edges touching up. Also I think you need ...

Hello, This is very good for a 10 minute poem and it does focus on a very serious issue, so well done. I liked the rhyme, it went together well ...