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Re: The World Through Different Eyes
Hello Scarlett! I really enjoyed this, it was truly a great idea and it was really well executed. Just a couple of things I noticed: If you ever got a ...
Jul 1, 2010 -
Re: Stronger Now
Hello Autumn! I loved this! It was really deep and emotive. I have a just a couple of tips to help you make your poem more descriptive and to make ...
Jun 30, 2010 -
Re: follow your heart
Hello Daniel! I just replied to your Welcome Area post! :) Ok, on to your poem. This is really great for your first post. You have structure in there and ...
Jun 30, 2010 -
Re: A Life I Didn't Need
Hello Sillyducky! Happy Reviewing Day! I liked this! :) I agree with the others though, this wasn't particularly poetic. As Snoink said you need to shorten it to just the ...
Jun 27, 2010 -
Re: In the memory of Deryn jones
Hello Spy! It's reviewing day so I'm here to review! :) Firstly I have to say that I agree with ROC, I got a little confused. I'll discuss this in ...
Jun 27, 2010 -
Re: Gradual Storms
Hello Yoha! This is really good! I really like your use of description and the subject matter, very inventive! Ok, so I have a couple of suggestions that you could ...
Jun 22, 2010 -
Re: Again
Hello Lil! I really enjoyed your poem it was extremely beautiful and it had truly beautiful imagery. Just a couple of points. as I felt the heavy burden clamping onto ...
May 18, 2010 -
Re: Melvin Harvey does the unexpected
Hello Skicrazyallday, I really enjoyed this, it was a quirky little piece and I didn't see the twist coming which was great! There were a couple of little things I ...
May 11, 2010 -
Re: Mediums
Hello Hobbit :D I really enjoyed your poem and it is, of course, very true. There were a couple of things I noticed: Though not all of them whole or ...
May 11, 2010 -
Re: A Criminal's Heart-Prologue (REVISED)
Hello Shubi! I enjoyed this prologue, it made me want to read the rest of the book which is really great :D There were a couple of things that I ...
May 9, 2010 -
Re: Tears of fruit (Part 3, Finale)
Hello Aspiring! A really moving end to your competition entry. I love it. I see now why the monkeys stealing the fruit was so significant. I loved your description throughout ...
May 9, 2010 -
Re: Tears of Fruit (Part 2)
Hey Aspiring, Again a very nice piece. It really takes us deeper into the world of this New India :D One typo I noticed that I'll point out to save ...
May 7, 2010 -
Re: Marina
Woah! Stelagineva summed that up for me in that above post. Wow. Wow. Wow. WOW! That was so captivating and amazing! Just one thing I noticed, when you ahve a ...
May 4, 2010 -
Re: To Bicker Like An Old Married Couple
Hello BrokenWing! Welcome to YWS, by the way. I happened to notice the date you joined :D Ok so this was a really cute little piece. Just some pointers: In ...
May 1, 2010 -
Re: The Rabbit
Hello Ski! This was so sad, and sick and horrible at the same time and the worst thing is is that it could actually be true... I can't imagine killing ...
May 1, 2010