Lycando

Hey there it's Lycando here! First off, please space out your writing into paragraphs, I know you kinda have them now but they're paragraphs which super close to each other, ...

Alright, I'll be here to review your work! First of, please space out your paragraphs :) It's pretty hard to read a whole bunched of words being fitted into one ...

Hello there! I'll be here to review your story! "I don’t want to live with a bunch in rich kids for three years, and no doubt they’ll have an attitude,” ...

Really awesome story! And I like that you placed Eckels thoughts in italics, it's always a good way rather than normal text which confuses the reader. I like the way ...

First and foremost, PLEASE space out your paragraphs, it's very hard to read when they so tightly crowded in together. It's like a whole chunk of text and it hurts ...

I really loved this story, simple as it may be. It carried a lot of weight on the emotional part. I like the dialogue too, but I think the caps ...

I really like this story! The flashback was good, like Mel was experiencing a traumatic thought that kept haunting her. And how that plus the rejection made her try and ...

First of all I find the romance part was a little rushed, and I think Catherine agreed a little too easily to the proposal. So did her parents when they ...

Well I must say this, and forgive me for being harsh, but this story is just like a normal everyday kind of life of a average guy. It doesn't really ...

First thing, which is VERY important, start each paragraph with a CAPITAL letter. The story is good, it's pretty well flown. But your lack of punctuation makes the whole chunk ...

Let me just say this, I like your style of writing, talking to the reader directly. Of course I know this may just be the prologue of your story. This ...

The sounds of swords and axes and all manner of death dealing weapons jarred in clashing contrast to the war cries of the warriors grim that sought only the destruction ...

It's a enjoyable read, the start is good and it's flows smoothly into the second part, which is the dialogue. "Lord Alistair, hm.. sir?" I think you meant to write ...

Love this story! It's a good read, maybe a little too fast paced, but that's the point isn't it? Nitpicks aside, I would say that some punctuation was left out, ...

It's an awesome read, I like this story! First off, I see that you mixed the past and present tense in this, but given that the past tense is only ...