Luxury

This is such a graceful, eloquent short story. There aren't any errors that I can see and it's all written so well and so realistically. I love the dialogue. I ...

I like it just the way it is, however... The only thing that influences us to believe that Arizona listens all the time is the narrator telling us so. It ...

A certainly interesting chapter! As a reader, I'm not satisfied with some of this. It's easier to read on a computer by setting your dialogue on a new line. There ...

Luxury here to review this poem of yours! It reminds me of reading a story. I can imagine both people... There are annoying errors here and there that have no ...

Aww... You could have made the ending so much better. I feel the ending was too emotional and didn't flow with the rest well enough. You know, because it's talking ...

Ohh... It's so terribly sad, I don't know if I would read it, but it is good. 'Tears dripped from my face...' Too common for something so uncommon!! Use something ...

My favorite stanzas are number 2 and the last. This is a very clear poem, but for stanza 4, last line, I think 'Without a known source' works better, mostly ...

Wow! That blew me away! I seriously loved it. The first sentence left me intently captivated. Any minute now. This in itself is something that automatically attracts. I knew that ...

First line: December of never wry conventions A very relatable sentence. I immediately think of holiday outings and family gatherings and crowded public events. I'm not sure 'wry' fits very ...

I love most everything about the middle and the end. The beginning is very orderly and it's wonderful how it memorably introduces your character's - but the first sentence is ...

This is a piece I really enjoyed... I appreciate the altogether order and cadence as well as the intensity it brings forth in each of the stanzas. I agree with ...