Hey there!
I just happened to stumble across this one and it just blew my mind! I'm going through a Game of Thrones phase right now, so I totally got it...but I'm also human, so I like to think that I'd have gotten it even if I wasn't into Game of Thrones. Anyway, let me give you my review.
First, I think that this poem, although dealing with Medieval entities such as kings and lords (which, as you say, was derived from chess), is still very much applicable to contemporary society. I mean everywhere we look there is a war happening nowadays. So I commend you for tackling something that is important to society.
You also have an AMAZING skill with use of imagery. Lines like "Peace like fleeting, winter light" and "tattered souls and corpses rent" are simply beautiful and do much to propel the story and emphasise the theme of war that you have going on here. Even the rhymes work. They're so carefully selected that I didn't even realize that the lines were rhyming until I was reading it the second time round. You have a keen sense of sound; your use of alliteration in the line: "Prepares the sword, the spear, the sling" is great and adds much musicality to the poem. The poem is very melodious, despite being about a heavy subject and this contrast brought a sort of "coolness" to the poem.
Overall, I thought this was simply wonderful. Please keep writing. This was awesome
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