LowKey

Reminds me of these really old fairy tales I'm reading. They're the Grimm's versions of them, which makes them as close to the original as you're apt to get. Both ...

Interesting. A common topic, but an interesting metaphor. One that could be made all the better with a little strengthening. You lay down the foundation (so to speak) of the ...

Aw, cute! I remember a long, long time ago hearing about the roses, and I think yellow meant something too, but for the life of me, I can't remember. It's ...

Good structure, good concept, but a little too jumpy for me. You gor from one area of the jungle to the other before we even have time to look around, ...

Yikes, rhyming. Rhyming isn't a bad thing, far from it. It does pose some challenges, however. Once you settle on a rhyme scheme, you often feel the need to stick ...

Poems and death go as far back as religion, where, before written language was a common form of communication, people told stories in poem-format to make it easier to remember. ...

Interesting poem. Actually reminds me of someone else's summer love. It actually matched emotion for emotion pretty well. Except, their's ended happily and is still going on, I think. So ...

Nice poem. Good imagery. Particularly like the line, "The slither of a belly on the moss" because of how clearly it conveys the image you are trying to describe. It ...

Opening scene: a teenager whose heart has just been broke (we assume) and who is now contemplating suicide (again, an assumption, but this time reinforced by the title). Cut to ...

She could not scratch nor could she bite, 8 syllables here For the chains of responsibility towards his family bound her with might. 19 here She huffed and puffed and ...

Goodness, AM. 0.o Pretty poem! But a little on the boring side. It doesn't appear to convey any message right off the bat and seems to have descriptive words running ...

Love the choppiness here! Works very well with the subject at hand, as does the repetition. However, the part where you repeat but not really, where he comes to life ...

I don't mind the extra spaces between the words, personally. It all depends on the feel you're trying to give your readers. I put a very very slight mental paus ...

Technically, Snow doesn't turn read with blood unless there's heaps and heaps of it in one single spot. But seeing as these things tend to spread out, unless she gutted ...

That is a weeeeird poem. But very poetic. I have no idea what it's about, and it does sound rather whimsical, but wow. Very interesting. It might be just the ...