Louisiana15

Hello! I love this that you've written. First, the picture threw me off while I was reading because it interrupted the structure of the poem a bit... Also, the lack ...

Hello, Louisiana here! This was longer than I expected when I read your title. So, surprise surprise. I feel like you were too descriptive. There were way too many similes ...

Hello, Louisiana here to review your poem. First off, this was quite confusing. With lack of punctuation where much-needed, I could not follow where you were going with this. I ...

Hello!! This was beautifully written. I have a few things to comment on. First, waves of the ocean, in literature, is how sex is described since back-in-the-day, it was improper ...

Hello! First off, wow... I am actually experiencing this right now in my life so I feel a strong connection to this poem. It is a beautifully written piece but ...

Hey, first off, I completely understand the depressed feelings with an ex. From personal experience, I can say you portrayed your emotions perfectly. The simile of a heart being a ...

WOW! Powerful message. First, if you want the traditional satire, you'd include humor into it--you poke fun at the issue. I don't see any humor within this. Rather, I see ...

The power of desire shines through... I wasn't expecting it to be portrayed in such a way, actually. You made it a lot more subtle than I normally see. Sexual ...

Reality has slapped humankind in the face in your poem. Beautiful job. First, I'd like to comment that the lack of capitalization is very distracting and it kept drawing me ...

Wow, this is great. The imagery is the clouds are wonderful; it adds so much meaning and depth to your work. I like how you labeled each section, revealing the ...

Hello! This was a lot shorter than I expected but there is so much one can take away from this that can't be taken from a page long poem. For ...

This is a "cute" sort of poem. Reminds me of the Hades and Persephone story in Greek mythology with dark and light clashing; "he is... the cluster of camphire" and ...

Wow.... this is so powerful. Friendship, secret oath---all meant to be broken. Children's innocence is striking when we look back to our own childhoods and all the promises we might ...

Black--a color associated with depression-- is portrayed beautifully in this. The imagery is strong and vivid; I can see the cuts, I can see the girl's mask. I feel the ...

People typically text the way you wrote your poem, so I see this as something meant for young people. We all can relate to loving the weekends and having a ...