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Nah Stori. Ari's death helps symbolize how Max is going from hunted to heroine. Awesome, Midnight

I *liked* this. Placeholding. I'll review soon.

Okay... glad this is under Other Poetry Dude. Please give some emotion. Fly On, Write On, Fellow YWSer TheNewHero.

Thank you both! I think it's a bit unfortunate I can't post the whole of Chapter 1 boom bam because the second after the last sentence, the title begins to ...

Thanks Kaedee, that's exactly what I wanted to know! I haven't ever skateboarded myself by the way :lol:

you're* Hey! Well done! This was good but a bit short. You could extend this my friend. Pour out your feelings while hinting at the social networking site and then ...

Well done. I liked this. It seemed kind of personal... enough. BUt a suggestion would to be to make it more... detailed? Accurate? Whatever the case - awesomeness. Fly On, ...

Awesome. I don't have much to critique as I'm not used to critiquing poems :( Dark cinderella + Evil Knight? Nice.

Hey I really like this poem. It defined the world I'd like to live in. "Grass stained jeans" Nice man :D *LIKED* This should be featured.

I really liked this piece but it felt a bit... empty. Just a suggestion: try swapping it around, boy crying instead? *Liked*

Hey again. Darkness, just a little tip, it's better if you write your different chapters as different topics. Because No-one is going to see Chapter 3 and 4 and 5 ...

I'm not so sure about this. I was hoping for a funny poem but that's just cause of a friend I have. There should be no apostrophe on the violets.

Congrats on the feature, dude.

Heya! I liked this piece but I think it could be longer. One tip? There goes the Red Queen, The White Queen, If you want you could change it to, ...

Really good, maybe one day I'll use this with your permission? :D *Liked*